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我看了之前你写的文章,逻辑关系的连词的比较犀利。我少少的修改一下. 结构清晰明确,应该是你一贯的风格,但是这样的题目风格想拿高分不容易啊,例子太难举了。如果你能把例子都编出个国家名字,地点,时间,具体的统计数字,再具体点的例子就会更好。
1007 特训小组独立 The only effective way to encourage energy conservation is by increasing prices of gasoline and electricity( q$ d: J* k p3 `, W0 q, }; L
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High energy costs are an important concern that affect our society. Since shortage of energy become more and more severe, we can not emphasize the importance of energy saving too much.(It is no much to further emphasiz **) In order to achieve that, numerous proposals have been handed out. Some people hold the opinion that the most effective way to save energy is to increase the prices of gasoline and electricity. However I think it is not a wise solution which would do little to this issue (It引导的主语从句,是不是这样比较好,It is not a wise solution to solve this issue). In my opinion, there are some other solutions which would have a better effect.
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First and foremost, we could not underestimate the power of individuals. In order to protect our environment, everyone(all citizens,和下文的 they align) should take the responsibility to energy conservation, and they should take actions in their daily life. For example, individuals could pay more attention to the usage of domestic appliances. A survey indicates that the air-conditions consume huge amount of electricity every year. If we turn the (air condition)temperature one degree higher in summer and one degree lower in winter, our nation would save 5 percent of electricity than before. At the same time, the reduce of electricity will save people (delete) considerable money (for every family). Compared to the policy of increasing energy prices which will add to their financial burden, this method will be more economic (economical, 区分economy,economic,economical) and acceptable./ O4 X; b7 A; X
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On the other hand, government should play an important role in energy conservation. As we all know, in recent years, the number of privacy(private) cars has increase dramatically, creating a heavy demand for gasoline. If people in city could make more use of public transportation such as subway and bus, that will be a great help to the nation's energy conservation. To achieve this, Government should invoke their people to use public transportation, as well as they should take actual (emphathic) methods to refine the public transportation. I think with the cooperation of government and their people, this will be more feasible to save our energy than increasing(increase) energy prices .
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0 h, s" e, C9 h8 p; T3 T4 XLast but not least, we could use renewable energy to replace non-renewable energy sources such as gasoline and coals. Compared to increase energy prices, it is a better avenue to releave energy comsuption essentially. For the reason that the solar and wind could be constantly being renewed or restored, we could make more use of this kind of energy by building solar and wind plant to produce electricity, which would be effective to save the other energy such as coal and oil.
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, V3 I+ d% z+ g$ R2 y% pFrom the discussion above, it is safely to dispute the statement that increasing the prices of gasoline and electricity is the most effective way to save energy. In the favor of ourselves and our next generation, everyone should take action in energy conservation. |
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