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不好意思发晚了。。。
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? 团队合作中,不能接受批评的人不会成功的 In the teamwork, the one who can not accept criticism would not be succeful.
Nowadays it is always a necessity to collaborate with others, so as to complete a complex task. When confronting a problem, a team maybe the excellent approach to figure out satisfied (改成satisfying…我可能拼的不对啊)solutions to the problems. However, some people who fail to behave with patience and a open mind and could hardly accept ideas different(还是说different ideas?)from theirs not only would ruin the process of solving the problems, but also make themselves a inflexible people who will not succeed in the future.
The first factor coming into my mind is that people (a person,因为后面的share是复数形式) who can not accept criticism , even that is friendly always(还可以说成even in a friendly way,我感觉这个更顺一点;还有,加上逗号,把这句变成插入语更加通畅一点) ,share a narrow mind, which is the obstacle for them in advancing their careers. (这句不知道怎么改,感觉你的从句套多了有点不顺。。。或者是我的从句理解能力不够)For instance, my uncle's colleague, who is the sales man in a food company, would not accept any advice from others. When my uncle and other colleagues in a sales team are discussing how to promote the latest products of their company, the man always show exited (excite?) at first, talking a lot about his plan regardless of other suggestions. If someone in the team points one the disadvantages of his planning, he would get totally irritated and depressed. For ten years, he could only work for the company as a common salesman, on the contrary, my uncle, who is pleased to hear different voices about one project he undertakes gained a promotion in last year.
To back up my points of view, it is relevant to conclude that due to the criticism would offer us great ideas of the perspectives deferring from us, the one who fail to accept the suggestions would lose the respect from others. Indeed, in a team, we usually are keen on working with someone who are amiable and with an open mind. Some people who just insist his or her own ideas would find it difficult to obtain the respects from others, since they show their impatience and narrow mind in the process of team work.
Adding more credibility to my argument is that it is someone with special characters that achieves success finally, even though it seems that they could not bear different ideas from others, such as Bill Gaze and Jack Welch, they would accept criticism sometimes. After all, one could not make the right choice every time. Consequently, people who look unlikely to listen to others’ criticism in fact ever trying listening to and accept ideas opposite to his own.(这句的后半句不懂)
In summary, based on the points demonstrated above, I strongly believe that it is of difficulty for people who could not bear criticism would not have a success. (it is of difficulty for people who could not bear criticism to have success.)
总体感觉不错,但是有些句子不是很通顺,另外,感觉你找的点还不够多,但是第一点的例子很好,学习了! |
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