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edreamUID: 2202536

第二周作业
Issue 94
提纲：
我认为学生是应该多了解一下除了本学科以外的领域，但这应建立在尊重学生的个人兴趣上的基础上，而且还要注意尺度问题。
分论点一：鼓励学生拓宽知识面，这可以带来许多好处。
分论点二：一定要尊重学生的本意，否则，反而产生负面影响。
分论点三：这种向外的拓展也要注意尺度，不要捡了芝麻丢了西瓜．

I fundamentally agree with speaker’s assertion that student should take a variety of courses outside the student’s field of study to become “truly educated”. However, we should respect the student’s own opinion and decision .As to various fields unknown, a student has to pay an attention to extend too far from his own study , after all he should take the responsibility as a student .

I concede that it is reasonable to encourage students to know about different disciplines related to different fields. It can bring benefit to students. Take a practical problem for example, many freshmen complain that they have made wrong decision on choosing majors and they are not interested in their own majors at all. If they had tried to know more about different majors and fields which could help them understand what they were really interested in before entering universities, they would be enjoying their majors now. Another aspect I want to mention is that by taking the courses outside his own field of study, he can do better in his own field, because various academics disciplines are interrelated. Here is a simple example, no matter what is your major , you’d better know how to use computer, since computer becomes a basic communication implement. There are other benefits which a small issue cannot contain them all.

On the other hand , as the practitioners of this deed ,we should respect students’own decision. If a student is really interested in his own field of study and does not want to take other courses, compelling force is not needed. I know many students are compelled by their parents to take so many courses that they feel they have learned nothing and wasted a lot of time. In sum, interest is most important.

To the extent we broaden our knowledge to become truly educated, we should strike a balance between our own study and the courses outside this study. That means we should emphasize on one .Referring to our limited time and energy, if we spend equal time on every discipline, maybe we can not do nothing well. we will be dilettantes for ever.  Thus, we must be careful to our eagerness to the unknown and realize that we should choose  the courses according to our own capability.

In the final analysis, to become truly educated one should properly deal with the correlation between his own study and other additional courses of different disciplines. One who has a broad knowledge base is welcomed by their friends and by society, but there is no need to take too much additional courses.

pewcg8UID: 2143213

我明天再发我的作业,写的我没感觉了,现在需要恢复状态,作为组长,我先去把别的组的学习一下,呵呵,大家也可以多串门.

nostrumUID: 2124189

原帖由 edream 于 2006-6-3 21:40 发表
to nostrum
看了你的issue 9４，不行了，受打击了！

啊？
我写得不好是不是？
最近忙得要哭了，其实这两篇issue可以写成很像的，但是我一想到写issue就要吐血了
唉……可能真的会累死

yuexuanUID: 155186

第二次作业
我的开头结尾基本都是我以前考托福总结的模板，大家看了别腻啊
issue128
It is often asserted that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. In reality, however, formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

What is the purpose of education? To make the people’s minds and spirits free or to restrain our minds and spirits, which is a much debated problem in that it affected everybody in their daily lives. People may prefer one to another, although some have no opinion about it. But if I am concerned, I think that the purpose of education should call for a balance between freeing the minds and the spirits and restraining our minds and the spirits.

First of all, education can provide necessary conditions and ways by which to people show their minds and spirits freely. Experiencing the learning a host of knowledge and information, people would know which idea should be expressed and how to show their minds and spirits freely with various means. It is just same to say right thing in right time. Some example can give some light to this point. Everyone has the right for choosing government official and can freely make the choice based on their opinion and idea. In order to choose freely, people must have grasped knowledge on law and right and how to vote. Otherwise people perhaps can not realize the voting freely or their voting is against national law.

However, the other important function of education is to restrict people free in certain fields. The nature of free is not that people could do everything they want to do and show their emotion without restriction of law or discipline. If case is so, society, an organization of innumerable persons, will be under-control and in a chaos state. Then it will be impossible that they freely express their feeling or open their spirit. For example, students from poverty will be educated to make money with hard working by themselves not with illegal ways, although robbing and stealing ever came to their thinking in fact. So teachers tell them looking for suited means which is allowed by law not at will.

Finally, if only taking restraining well, people could more free their opinion. Because after educated, an orderly and harmonious atmosphere could be created, in which people may show themselves randomly without others mocking or attacking. Ignoring one site is not advisable and may bring about bad influence to the other. So the intention of education is not to free the mind and the spirit but tends to confine our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
  
All in all, from what has been discussed above, the title statement is unilateral and we can draw the conclusion that the purpose of education should call for a balance between freeing the minds and the spirits and restraining our minds and the spirits

yuexuanUID: 155186

argument
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The argument concludes that choosing Adams estate firm can help us sell our home quickly and at a decent price. To justify the conclusion, the argument point out the following facts: Adams has more real estate agents than Fitch and part of them work only part-time in Fitch; Adams’ revenue is two times than Fitch’s and has higher average price; and the arguer refers his two experiences that selling home using Adams took one month last year and selling home using Fitch spent four months ten years ago. Careful examination of the supporting evidence, however, reveals that it lends little credible support to the conclusion.

First of all, the fact that Adams has more real estate agents does not necessary indicate that selling home using it is superior. Although the number of Fitch staff is small and many of whom is part-time, they work perhaps more effective. They maybe have lots of knowledge about how to sell house effectively and how to sell house with high price. However, the staff from Adams lack practice experience, they maybe not familiar with house-selling market and would make case worse when they have to work by themselves.

Secondly, there are no linking and casual relationships between revenue and selling quickly and with a high price. The fact that Adams has more revenue does not illustrate the firm makes more money, perhaps which cost more in publicizing or others, at last Adams does not payoff. Then even the assuming that Adams makes more money is true, which can not show selling house using Adams is faster and price is high. Perhaps last year, Fitch was training their agents or the firm was taking various measurements for running efficiently, so the firm has not enough time to take on too much program and delay them to nest year.

Finally, the arguer’s experience does not provide adequate evidence that homes listed with Adams sell faster. Due to the time is different, it is unfair to compare selling house ten years ago with last year. Time changing results to the change of working way and market. If considering all factors, the home selling ten years ago is maybe more effective than that of last year. In fact, the reasons that play important role in selling is the home quality itself, its surrounding and market needing.

To sum up, the evidence cited in the argument is vague and incomplete, thus does not lend strong support to the conclusion that the arguer maintains. To better evaluate this conclusion, we need more information concerning home quality itself, its surrounding and market needing.

yuexuanUID: 155186

第二次还差一篇，歇歇先

pewcg8UID: 2143213

恩,希望大家不要光赶作业,把以前的文章一定要总结,我们现在有这么多文章了,大家可以不但看看自己的,还把别人的也学习一下,同时希望大家能积极讨论,关于作文的任何问题都可以.

pewcg8UID: 2143213

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monkeycolaUID: 2206472

issue94  "Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to become truly educated."

The speaker asserts that universities should require every students to take courses outside the student’s field of study to became truly educated. In my opinion, I fundamentally agree with this assertion that it is essential and imperative for each student to acquire knowledge outside his own field to make new progress and fulfill truly educated.
  
The primary reason why I agree with this assertion is that learning knowledge from different field and life-long learning are the cornerstones of success in today’s complex and rapidly changing society. No longer can the person who is steeped in one academic discipline, but knows nothing about anything else, meet today’s demand. Only learning knowledge of one field which is so called narrow education definitely will obstruct the progress of students.

In addition, In the morden times,merely knowing a variety of one field are more and more tedious and boring.Learning knowledge of diversified fields that plays a key role in determining one’s opportunity for success.Not only widening one’s academic perspective of one field,but also enhancing one’s ablility to solve different problems.Courses like philosophy,politics,methodology,
and literature help students gain the ability of analytical thinking and critical thinking,at the same time courses like art and literature help students gain an aesthetic appreciation of the world.

Moreover,acquiring knowledge of diverse academic disciplines equips one with independent thinking skills and those,coupled with desire to learn,are the best preparation for career and life that any of us can prossess.Apart from the course of one’s own field,the student should know that his future is very fluctuated,and many problems beyond his major will appear without any precursor,so that it is very vital for him study something more than his field.For instance,nowadays,some universities are very enthusiastic about teaching course about life skills:such as logical thinking,creative problem-solving,analysis and so on.The actual content of these courses are secondary to the process,which is supposed to train the students to be able to handle whatever life may present,especially all the unknowns of the future.
  
Admittedly,for a student,more proficient with one field,more probability to achieve success。When we acquiring the knowledge of different academic disciplines,we must make a emphasis on one field to avoid becoming a dilettante,the main field what we concentrate on is the basis to achieve success.And also the universities should set some subjects according to student’s requisition and shouldn’t compel them to learn different academic disciplines.

In sum,to became truly educated one must strike a balance in one’s educational pursuit.And acquiring knowledge of different fields are essential to achieve success and also help them comprehend and adopt to the rapid changing world that they are living in.

monkeycolaUID: 2206472

augument4   The following was posted on an Internet real estate discussion site.

"Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents. In contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch, and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago, I listed my home with Fitch and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams."

In this argument,the arguer recommends that using Adams to sell houses quickly and at a good price.In order to support his recommendation he cited that Adams has more employees than Fitch,and some of the employees in Fitch are merely working part-time.In addition,he pointed out that last year the revenue and average home sales of Adams are all higher than Fitch.Furthermore,the arguer based on his previous experience which has show that Adams sell house more quickly.At first glance,the certain statistics in this recommendation seems very specific and convincing.A careful examination of it,however,would reveal how groundless it is.
  
In the first place,the arguer provided no evidence that the numbers of real estate agents and working hours per week of a agent have direct relationship with the quality of a real estate firm.As is well known that,the quality of a firm is not only denpend on the numbers of employees and workind hours,but also the working efficiency,the attitude of work,versatile services.Lacking such evidence,it is possible that even some of the agents in Finch are part-time,they work much more efficiently and productively than the employers.
  
In the second place,the arguer fails to prove that Adams could sell houses at good price.Firsly of all,although the arguer cited that last year the revenue and average home sales are higher,probably in other years the sale of Adams is fewer than Finch.In addition,tha arguer didn’t make a compare with sold houses of two firms.Perhaps the houses Adams sold are all at a good geographic area or havind been completely deliberate decorated,there is no doubt that the average price is higher than Finch. Or perhaps sale is higher in Adams simply because it has more employees.Wihtout ruling out these possibilities that,the arguer couldn’t convincingly show that the Adams can sell houses at good price.

Finally,the arguer uses previous experience,instead of specific survey,to illustrate that Adams sell houses quickly,ignoring the factor of time which perhaps can change everything including the ablity of purchase,the influence of the location,the maket of the houses and so on.For instance,in the past,the supply of the houses surpassed the demand of market,so it took a long time for Finch to sold the house of the arguer.In the contrary,with the expansion of population,the demand of houses surpass the supplement,selling a house is not time-consuming.Obviously,On front of the current situation,no one can apply previous experience to nowadays’practice,so doed the arguer.
  
To sum up,the recommendation is not well reasoning and lacks credibility.To make this recommendation more convincing,the arguer would have to provide evidence to prove that the employees of Adams are working more efficiently and productively and it would be essential for the arguer to make a effective and representative survey of the houses sold of these two firms to support his recommendation.

[ 本帖最后由 monkeycola 于 2006-6-4 14:24 编辑 ]

morallreyUID: 2191298

改xxxxzoe的argument47
文章很漂亮
In this argument, the arguer concludes that the cooling in mid-sixth century was caused by a volcanic eruption. To justify this conclusion the arguer points out that a large cloud, which was created by a huge volcanic eruption or a large meteorite collision, would have been capable of blocking the sunlight. Also, the arguer points out some Asian records of a boom would be consistent with the volcanic eruption that time. I find the argument unpersuasive, for several reasons.（开头分析清晰，流畅）

First of all, the arguer fails to provide the evidence that this cooling was caused merely by the volcanic eruption or the meteorite collision. It is possible that such temperature change was caused by the melting of a large scope of icebergs or other reasons. However, the arguer provides no evidence.

Secondly, even if the Asian historical records support（supporting）the boom existed, the arguer unfairly asserts that there was a volcanic eruption. However, the arguer provides no evidence to support that the boom was caused by such huge volcanic eruption. It is the(去掉the) possible that this boom was created by a earthquake or other reasons. Without eliminating this possibility , I cannot draw the conclusion that there was a volcanic eruption that time.

Thirdly, as the arguer asserts that there was a boom created by volcanic eruption, however, only the records in Asia mentioned it. In this event, the arguer cannot convince me that this volcanic eruption can affect the whole world and further cause the sufficient dust to block the sunlight.

Finally, even if there was no record of flash that we can see, the arguer fails to draw the conclusion that there was no collision at that time. It is entirely possible that the collision occurred in an（a） desolate area so that nobody observed that flash, furthermore this collision （加may合理一些，到底有没有无人晓知）occurred without that flash, of course there was no record.

In conclusion, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To convince me that the cooling was caused by a volcanic eruption, the arguer must provide more substantiated information that the volcanic eruption indeed happened. To better assess the argument, I would need more detail that coverage of （用法似乎有误）volcanic eruption happened and how can it created such a powerful dust.
   文章分析透彻，清晰，逻辑鲜明，是一篇佳作！

monkeycolaUID: 2206472

咱们的帖子越来越多，文章越来越分散，找也不方便，建议向别的组学习，另开一个作文贴！
越洋农场站队第一次作业，第二次作业依次类推，不知组长同意不？？

pewcg8UID: 2143213

回复上边,那好吧,我们先把第二次做完,然后我们第三次重开帖子.大家注意,我会再前5楼给出连接

xxxxzoeUID: 2200473

那还应该在总帖里给出链接，不然也不好找

xxxxzoeUID: 2200473

xxxxzoe 第三次作业
（这个礼拜产出比较低只有这一篇，单词已经把我弄得心力交瘁了，我会尽快赶上大家的.sorry）
ISSUE 128
It is ofren asserted that the purpose of education is to free the mind and the spirit. In reality, however, formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

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1# 正式教育非常系统，能起到很好的引导作用（如绘画、乐器学习），提出只有充实的基础才能自由地拓展知识
2# 正式教育也存在缺陷，需要改革
3# 提出正式教育和自由之间没有冲突，应该辨证地看待两者之间地关系


In modern society, many people believe that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free which is its own intrinsical responsibility. As a matter of fact, it is the other way around. Formal education, in the sight of myself, do support the freedom of our minds and spirits instead of restraining them. Besides, relationship between theise couple should be discerned dialectically.


First of all, only formal education, which is  extraordinary sustematic, can lead us to an extensive thread of new ideas. To all known, foundation is an indispensable fator to achieve the high level of one's field, such as pencial sketch of painting, fingering practice of playing paino, and so forth. These are all basic skills which is taught as the first step in formal education. Then, one will be taught how to use basic skills efficiently, we named it way methodology which plays a curcial role in formal education. Furthermore, formal education will also teach one person certain professional knowledge in order to help that guy maintain the requirment to achieve his interests. Based on the above, it will ve much more toilless to widen one's mind and generate own ideology, utimately, free his mind and spirit.


Although fomal education is of great advantage to us, it also has some flaws. For example, there are some too many easy lessons in formal education that will waste our time and gradually decrease our interest. Besides, one may complain that there are too many conpulsory courses, however, people have no any interesting in these courses, thus, many students may drop it and left little sutdents in classroom waiting for the teacher who will feel badly either. All in all, there are still many flaws that we cannot enumerate all, hence, formal education need reform.


Last but not least, there is no real conflict between formal education and freedom of minds and spirits, we should consider their relationship dialectically. Imagine if there is no formal education, basic institution and sicial insurance would be destoryed because there are too many queer thoughts from people's free minds, furthermore, there would be various of anomalous inventions yet worth nothing. On the contrary, if we abandon that freedom, formal education would lead us to a mechanical and dull way because our mind are narrowed. Therefore, as the host of our world, we should ascertain the interaction between them in order to make advantage of it to foster them both.


To sum up, it is improper to take formal education and freedom of minds and spirits into account separately. To be rel free, one ought to study in formal education which will further help you fly higher.