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Issue 94
Universities should require every student to take a variety of courses outside the student's field of study because acquiring knowledge of various academic disciplines is the best way to became truly educated.

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1# 教育的目的对于社会而言是输送能够适应当代社会要求的人才,具有多方面知识的复合型人才
2# 对于个人而言,学科之间是相互联系的,只学习单一知识只能闭目塞听,根本不可能成才
3# 但是,在学习多种知识的同时不能放弃对主要科目的深入研究,浅尝辄止对个人和社会都无裨益


with the high（这是什么意思？改成advanced或rapid比较好吧） development of modern society, the requirements of talent（ed） people become much complicated. It claims that people who has mastered multiple technologies or knowledges are eagerly demanded in（by） today's society. Therefore, it is essential for students to take various of courses that outside their field when they study in universities to perfect themselves.


For the society, the main purpose of education is to create more people with technologies and knowledges which are requisite in（of） the evolvement of modern society. The fashion of learning foreign language is a good example to illustrate this point. There are many people, whose major has nothing to do with foreign language, spend their spare time in goring（什么意思） to the language school to learn foreign language in order to advance their competitive ability with others. Why they do so you may ask（可以改成“so,you may ask why do they do that"吧）, The only answer is （that）society demand so. It can be described in details that China are open now（估计老美不懂，建议详述一下）, hence, there are so many people from foreign countries like USA, German and so forth come to China to invest that learning foreign language to communicate with them are indispensable. Besides, computer skill, communite ability and team-work ability are of basic damand for（the basic skills demanded ) today's talent people. Furthermore, there are much more complicated requirement in different fields which are not as easy as the above basic demand.（最好解释一下为什么外语的例子能支持”学生要全面发展，既然你说是社会要求的，不学不行，别人就有理由怀疑这种要求是否合理，学外语是否真的必要）


For people, to take a variety of courses outside their field can help accelerate the speed of being（being是一种状态，无所谓什么speed呀，可以改成becoming） a talent people that society required. Because different disciplines are closely interrelating（用过去分词interrelated） with each other. In the history of world evolution, there are many political problems can be described by(from) philosophy perspective, many neurology experiments are set up based on ecnomic models and many famous paintings are according to the physical structures. Therefore, learn more(the more one learns) form the outside field, the more topping one can be in his own field, for the outsider knowledge are not only compensating one's lack in his major but also breaking the limitation in one's mind and boarding it.


Nevertheless, I would caution that one dabble in too many disciplines can be his undoing: he learn(would learn) nothing only(改成but) waste time actually. The only purpose of studying outside field is to strength（en） the learning of our own major, this is the true education. People can learn many from outside even swift his interest to another field, that is not the problem, however, if one swift all the time that（that用在这成了从句了） will risk underming the initial purpose. All in all, we have to learn our major deep enough that（两个分句什么关系？） the outside knowledge can further promote our true education.


To sum up, it is beneficial to learn various courses from outside field both for the society and people self（themselves). People should learn their major to a certain deep, therefore, outside knowledge can better advance them. The most important is that to be turely educate, dabble one field is forbidden.（改成bootless好些吧，没人不让学呀）

文章总体结构清楚，提纲有条理，建议语法上多下功夫，尤其是从句的使用，不要生硬地延长句子以至衔接不好造成错误。提的不对请见谅

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