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72. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Grades (marks) encourage students to learn. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
再次麻烦您了
提纲
1:成绩帮助学生了解学习状况,所以促进学习
2:成绩可以引起同学直接的良性竞争,而这种竞争促进学生不断学习
3:好成绩可以增加成就感,自信,而这积极态度促进学习
综上,成绩促进学习。。
--------------------一边倒了... 其实一边倒无所谓的
When it comes to the topic that what encourage(单数) students to learn, people will come up with many answers, such as teacher's award, grades, expectations from parents, and so forth. From (缺a/my)personal perspective, I believe that it is grades that encourage students to learn.
In the first place(, as far as I am concerned,其实这句多余拉) I found that the grades can spur students to learn in that the marks(用they代替就好) can reflect the condition of a student’s learning. As (it多余) is known, it is the exams that most teachers(其实是教育体制在用这个衡量) used to evaluate students’ performance in learning, because the paper(exam,paper会让人觉得是发表的论文) can demonstrate that what students have learned and what they did not (master多余,用同一个动词就好,但是因为相同,就可以省略了). For example, I have taken a math exam, and my mark was not satisfied(主动). In accordance to analyzing the paper(同理) and the questions that I did(gave) the wrong answer, I (will 多余) would know what I did not acquire or what I need to focus on next time(既然前面说到了math,这里是否能加上whether solving equations, geometric problems, or just being careful in calculation之类的), and therefore I found the weaknesses myself and made a decision to correct or improve them next time. From this point, it is the grades show me that where I am wrong and what are my weaknesses, meanwhile it encourages me to promote the further study.
Furthermore, grades not only reflect what students learnt, but also can cause(start) positive competitions in the same class, which encourage(s) students to learn more indirectly (这里会让人误会你是说more indirectly,建议把副词放到鼓励前面,就不会有歧义了). On one hand, after the teacher hand off the paper(表达中式,改成“同学拿到成绩”较好), students will compare their marks with (缺that of)the others'. According to such compare(名词;另外用due to), the self-respect will promote students to catch up with those students whose grades are higher than them, which result(单数) in a positive competition in class. On the other hand, such competition is extraordinary(副词) essential for the future career development(重要的应该是the sense of competetion), since the real society is composed of competition and cooperation. Thus, we can safely (to多余;注意动词是can) draw a conclusion that students can learn more through comparing the marks with other students, which means that marks encourage students learn indirectly.
Last but not least, high marks, especially the mark with the one's hard work and perspiration, can help students to gain a kind of sense of achievement; it can promote(booster) student's confidence to some extent. Common sense and experience informs us that such confidence and sense of achievement is playing an essential role in a student's grown(growth). Confidence can make a student hold positive attitudes to the tomorrow(future), can make a student’s tolerate his frustration and failure. Such positive attitudes toward to learning can act as a psychological encouragement during the learning process. The more confidence, the more optimistic, and optimistic attitudes can let student be better in academic performance. That is to say, the academic scores not only bring about many positive psychological impacts, but also can promote student’s performance in sphere of academic. 这段写的太抽象了,说来说去就是能够促进心理健康,更好的迎接未来的挑战。如果我写:学生某科分数高了他看到自己辛勤劳动pay off了,有更大的信心把这门课学好,以此形成良性循环。长此以往,有利他树立健康心理。
To sum up, it is true that there are many aspects can encourage students learning, yet, I believe that grades play the most vital role during the whole educational process, not only about(about没有起到连接句子的用途) psychological influences, but also about gaining more knowledge. Grades really encourage students to learn.
--------------------------骄傲的分割了------------- 骄傲个啥。。。= =
作文究竟应该写成一边倒还是折衷写~~ 都可以
也是时gre写多了,总是想让步,再论证,但是现在看到很多人说托福考察的 well development (最后一句没错)
所以应该一边倒的充分论证... 这句我不同意
于是我纠结了...
您的意思是?
当然是看具体题目咯 我个人认为,让步是第三个理由写不出来的时候很handy的东西= =,当然2个理由也是完全可以的,总之没什么规定,让不让步看你自己喜好了
gaolingno1 发表于 2009-8-7 23:42 ![]()
写的好长啊,注意定时哦 |
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