进军美利坚Chineselady备考日志

skysunny2008UID: 2632579

Most people may consider that due to fast-speed life in modern society, cooking is/will be replaced in next decades. In particular, new style food, such as convenience rice and fast food(, ) reduces people’ time ( reduces time that people spend on food)on food prepared and cooked. However, I believe that even if more processed food assists humans in this busy world( 罗嗦了。。even if it is true), people will still spend more time on cooking and preparing food. And more details are as follow

Taking time on cooking for family members, friends and guests is a good way to show love, appreciation and feeling to them. Consider this: when visiting or joining a party, the food there were all processed and purchased from supermarket; (这两句话不是并列关系，不能用；号) I do not trust that the host or hostess really cared about this activity and respect visitors. It does not matter if holder’s cooking is not prefect; what humans are concerned is his/her attitude to them. Take my experience as example. This summer vacation I got involved in an internship and also needed to study for GRE, which decreased my lunch time from one hour to 40 minutes. In order to keep healthy and save my time, my boyfriend cooked and prepared every meal for me. So I could have fresh lunch and dinner directly. I know that he definitely prepared lunch much earlier than I thought; at the time when I was studying in library, he already went to market to buy vegetable or meat. He just hoped I could have good and healthy meal because I needed energy in working and learning. （+For me 加点过度吧，要不有点突兀）Homemade food is more tasty and healthier than the one in college cafeteria. His cooking may not as perfect as a chief, I would like to have every day in every meal because it was his way to present his love and feeling to me. That cannot be replaced by any processed food.（嘿嘿，例子挑不出啥毛病，就是语言简单了点）

presently,（At present 更加常用） humans are more concerned about eating habits and food. Even if convenient and fast food could assist people for a couple of times, it is not a wise method to adopt for a long time. As we know that processed food is made of additives that are（contain any nutrition） no any nutrition. Due to being healthy as foundation,( Considering health is the foundation of human beings, people in modern society embark on cooking in a scientific way, such as appropriate time to put salt and other seasonings. Firstly, it really needs time to master and practice; on the other hand, it takes people’s(去掉这个词就行) time to prepare it, choosing materials and buying fresh vegetable（既然是并列都用动词原形）. Additionally, the TV program of cooking is popular and sometimes they have cooking competition, which attract more humans to join in. Television program and social culture still focus on eating habit. And cooking and preparing domestically is and will be playing significant role in people’s life.

To conclude, taking time to cook a meal will not be replaced in next two decades due to cooking has its benefit in people’s life(due to 后面应该接名词，不是句子，可以这样写due to the fact that 或者用for ,as +句子). It can improve humans’ relation and also avoid having additives from food not homemade. 文章主体有两部分，第一部分观点和例子还是很恰当的，第二部分 貌似论据不怎么支持论点哦。 总体来说还是不错的，毕竟写的比较多，还是有优势的，语言还是有点简单，再接再厉哦！！！

真不好意思，本来用的红色改的，年过来就又没颜色了。。。

fish1044UID: 2190500

    Most people may consider that due to fast-speed life in modern society, cooking is/will(这样的/还是少用的好) be replaced(cooking will be replaced是什么意思？) in next decades. In particular, new style food, such as convenience rice(方便面是instant noodle，方便米饭应该是instant rice吧？) and fast food reduces people’ time on（后面跟名词） food prepared(preparation) and cooked. However, I believe that even if more processed food assists humans in this busy world, people will still spend more time on cooking and preparing food. And more details are as follow.! w4 g/ K2 X:

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    Taking(spending) time on cooking for family members, friends and guests is a good way to show love, appreciation and feeling to them. Consider this: when visiting(party不能visit的) or joining a party, the food there were all processed(processed from supermarket？) and purchased from supermarket; I do not trust that the host or hostess really cared about this activity and respect visitors. It does not matter if holder’s cooking is not prefect; what humans(这用human太大了吧) are concerned is his/her attitude to them. Take my experience as example. This summer vacation I got involved in an internship and also needed to study for GRE, which decreased my lunch time from one hour to 40 minutes. In order to keep healthy and save my time, my boyfriend cooked and prepared every meal for me.(你不是说你没有boyfriend吗？嘻嘻) So I could have fresh lunch and dinner directly(用这个单词想表达什么？). I know that he definitely prepared lunch much earlier than I thought; at the time when I was studying in library, he already went to market to buy vegetable or meat. He just hoped I could have good and healthy meal because I needed energy in working and learning. Homemade food is more tasty and healthier than the one in college cafeteria. His cooking may not as perfect as a chief, I would like to have them every day in every meal because it was his way to present his love and feeling to me. That cannot be replaced by any processed food.



Presently, humans are more concerned about(with) eating habits and food. Even if convenient and fast food could assist people for a couple of times, it is not a wise method to adopt for a long time. As we know that processed food is made of additives that are(have) no any nutrition. Due to being healthy as foundation(这说的也太中式了。。。), people in modern society embark on cooking in a scientific way, such as appropriate time to put salt and other seasonings. Firstly, it really needs time to master and practice; on the other hand, it takes people’s time to prepare it, choosing materials and buying fresh vegetable. Additionally, the TV program of cooking is popular and sometimes they have cooking competition, which attract more humans to join in. Television program and social culture still focus on eating habit. And cooking and preparing domestically is and will be playing significant role in people’s life.



To conclude, taking time to cook a meal will not be replaced in next two decades due to cooking has its benefit in people’s life. It can improve humans’ relation and also avoid having additives from food not homemade.

你的文章还是那个问题，太随意了。有空的话可以好好自己再改改自己的文章，尝试着尽量精简一些句子。
我总觉得你没有在认真写你的作文，很多错误其实都可以避免的。
加油哦，翠花。

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

10.26 In university students should take the history courses no matter what field they study

History knowledge is significant for any country because it represents one country’s civilization and culture. Humans should learn history to better understand their nation and wisdom from ancestors. There are various ways to gain history knowledge, such as medias, conversation or textbooks. Hence, I do not believe that it is necessary for college students from other fields to specifically study history. And more details are as follow.

For some students history subjects may bring burden to their life on campus. As I mentioned in the first passage that people could learn history from different ways. Some may be learn it unconsciously in daily life by reading or watching programs. College students as adults have wisdom and ability to choose what they need/should study. For instance, I study in medical university and presently have many researches to fulfill; besides on weekends I am obliged to visit a local hospital and nursing home to help those advanced people for my internship. In my situation, history class could give me more assignment, which will not benefit my future. For most of my classmates, they may consider that why should study a program that is totally no connection with future work position. In addition, students from other majors, such as computer science and electric engineering, may immerge themselves a lot in labs. Even though college has designed history subject, students probably would not show up or may do other school assignment in history class. That will neither benefit students nor university.

Students still can learn history knowledge without taking history courses. It all depends on their interests. Let’s take my friend as example. She studies accounting in college but is crazy about history. I also experienced her and her boyfriend tested each other about historical point. I know it sounds unbelievable they asked history events and questions in their dating. I trust that it is their hobby and interest to talk about history. None of them major in history science but they have enthusiastic to study it. For them history courses may limit their scope because most time teachers prefer to focus on textbooks. If this semester they should study Asian history, the information on other countries would be lacked.

To conclude, college is not obliged to assign history class for students because it will not bring most of them interests for some reasons. And they also could study by themselves if need.

melody106UID: 2559573

History knowledge is significant for any country because it represents one country’s civilization and culture. Humans should learn history to better understand their nation and wisdom from(of) ancestors. There are various ways to gain history knowledge, such as medias, conversation or textbooks. Hence, I do not believe that it is necessary for college students from other fields to specifically study history. And more details are as follow.
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$ A. h7 B4 x7 g2 D+ cFor some students history subjects may bring burden to their life on campus. As I mentioned in the first passage(paragraph) that people could learn history from different ways. Some may be learn it unconsciously in daily life by reading or watching programs. College students as adults have wisdom and ability to choose what they need/should study. For instance, I study in medical university and presently have many researches to fulfill; besides on weekends I am obliged to visit a local hospital and nursing home to help those advanced people这词什么意思？ for my internship. In my situation, history class could give me more assignment（s）, which will not benefit my future. For most of my classmates, they may consider换成wonder that why should study a program that is totally no connection换成related 或者that is改成there iswith future work position. In addition, students from other majors, such as computer science and electric engineering, may immerge themselves a lot in labs. Even though college has designed history subject, students probably would not show up or may do other school assignment in history class. That will neither benefit students nor university.6 T/ f4 ^9 {9 e

( S2 n" S7 U2 |0 Q& X4 r; S- nStudents still can learn history knowledge without taking history courses. It all depends on their interests. Let’s take my friend as （an）example. She studies accounting in college but is crazy about history. I also experienced her and her boyfriend tested each other about historical point你想说historical events？换成knowledge保险点. I know it sounds unbelievable they asked history events and questions in their dating. I trust that it is their hobby and interest to talk about history. None of them major in history science but they have enthusiastic这是个形容词 to study it. 这里最好加上转折的连接词Although they are fond of history, ……For them history courses may limit their scope because most time teachers prefer to focus on textbooks. If this semester they should study Asian history, the information on other countries would be lacked.6 [" E2 X7 \+ d- \3 H  L( Q

% A4 w; _  C# f- h& N- CTo conclude, college is not obliged to 这个词是说没有义务做什么，感觉好像学校设置历史课是被逼的，哈哈。assign history class for students because it will not bring most of them interests for some 改成the above reasons. And they also could study by themselves if 加上they need.
总体感觉思路还是挺清楚的，例子也比较有力，加强句式的变换和高级词汇的使用。加油！

ly8768UID: 2452066

183# 我是chineselady


History knowledge is significant for any country because it represents one country’s civilization and culture. Humans should learn history to better understand their nation and wisdom from ancestors. There are various ways to gain history knowledge, such as medias, conversation or textbooks. Hence, I do not believe that it is necessary for college students from other fields to specifically(这个词用在这里很奇怪) study history. And more details are as follow.

For some students history subjects may bring burden to their life(burden应该是加在students身上的而不是their life) on campus. As I mentioned in the first passage that people could learn history from(in different ways) different ways. Some may be(be不要) learn it unconsciously in daily life by reading or watching programs. College students as adults have wisdom and ability to choose what they need/should study. For instance, I study in medical university and presently have many researches to fulfill; besides on weekends I am obliged to visit a local hospital and nursing home to help those advanced people for my internship. In my situation, history class could give me more assignment, which will not benefit my future. For most of my classmates, they may consider that why should study a program that is totally no connection with future work position. In addition, students from other majors, such as computer science and electric engineering, may immerge themselves a lot in labs. Even though college has designed history subject, students probably would not show up or may do other school assignment in history class. That will neither benefit students nor university.

额，这段写着又偏离中心句了，中心句说会给学生带来负担，然而，后面先论述了人们在任何地方都可以学习到历史，学习历史的好处。需要理清下思路

Students still can(can still) learn history knowledge without taking history courses. It all depends on their interests. Let’s take my friend as example. She studies accounting in college but is crazy about history. I also experienced her and her boyfriend tested each other about historical point. I know it sounds unbelievable they asked history events and questions in their dating. I trust that it is their hobby and interest to talk about history. None of them major in history science but they have enthusiastic to study it. For them history courses may limit their scope because most time teachers prefer to focus on textbooks. If this semester they should study Asian history, the information on other countries would be lacked.

这段还不错

To conclude, college is not obliged to assign history class for students because it will not bring most of them interests for some reasons. And they also could study by themselves if need.

额啊，翠花注意中心句，一定注意啊

hualazimiUID: 2707120

History knowledge is significant for any country because it represents one country’s civilization and culture. Humans should learn history to better understand their nation and wisdom from （their）ancestors. There are (some) various ways to gain history knowledge, such as medias, conversation or (and)textbooks. Hence, I do not believe that it is necessary for college students from other (other 指代不明，我知道你的意思是除了history 的其他field)fields to specifically study history. And more details are as follow.

For some students， history subjects may bring burden to their life on campus. As I mentioned in the first passage that people could learn history from different ways. Some may be learn it unconsciously in daily life by reading （magazines）or watching programs. College students as adults have wisdom and ability to choose what they need/should （去掉should）study. For instance, I study in medical university and presently have many researches to fulfill; besides on weekends I am obliged to visit a local hospital and nursing home to help those advanced people for my internship. In my situation（in my point of view）, history class could give me more assignment, which will not(will not be benefit for 会不会更好一些？) benefit my future. For most of my classmates, they may consider that why should study a program that is totally no connection with future work position. In addition, students from other majors, such as computer science and electric engineering, may immerge themselves a lot in labs. Even though college has designed history subject, students probably would not show up or may do other school assignment in history class. That will neither benefit students nor university.

Students still can learn history knowledge without taking history courses. It all depends on their interests. Let’s take my friend as example. She studies accounting in college but is crazy about history. I also experienced her and her boyfriend tested each other about historical point. I know it sounds unbelievable they asked history events and questions in their dating. I trust that it is their hobby and interests to talk about history. None of them major in history science but they have enthusiastic to study it. For them history courses may limit their scope because most time teachers prefer to focus on textbooks. If this semester they should study Asian history, the information on other countries would be lacked.

To conclude, college is not obliged to assign history class for students because it will not bring most of them interests for some reasons. And they also could study by themselves if need.
（我总的感觉还是没太说清楚要写的东西，例证不能够很强的支持论点，我也有这个毛病，同改同改！）

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

10.27 Agree or disagree: The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more

Presently, information era has been occupied people’s life in modern society. Advanced techniques facilitate people in various ways. Electronic books, as one of new style reading methods already plays primary role in studying and working with its convenience. Therefore, there is a heated debate that whether printed books will be displaced in next two decades. I believe that reading and studying by printed books is/will be adopted still in the future.

Definitely in some ways printed books cannot compare with new style books like E-books. Currently, young generation prefers to download or copy reading material into their MP3 player or E-phone. It is convenience and portable to take to read when they are waiting for buses and sitting on the grasses in the garden. Take my E-phone as an example. I downloaded an English-Chinese dictionary and two specialized text books into my phone. It reduces my burden to carry a heavy dictionary and also I could only take limited books everyday, so when I studied in the college library, I checked my phone to gain relative information I need by reading books or dictionary from it. The reading materials and knowledge are the same with the printed books, but E-books make it easier to take in people’s pocket or handbag.

However, it needs more facilities and conditions to replace printed books and that is hard to achieve in next two decades. Furthermore, for people who live in isolated areas with limited economic conditions are not reasonable to pay for those modern equipments like computer. For instance, there are many Hope Project elementary schools in my countries, which are established by non-profit organizations or government. Most of them are located in weak economy regions. They probably just have books, notebooks, chalks and other stationeries. It is very distinguished from the conditions in developed place, in where students have videos and computers in their classrooms. Hope Project schools with limited number of computers cannot reach internet due to location in isolated places. Both environmental condition and local facility confine students to use advanced reading methods, such as E-books. Hence, in next two decades, it is hard to believe that students will not use printed books any longer because that traditional reading way still plays key role in many schools.

To conclude, with the evidence from above passages, printed books will use by schools and students. New style reading ways may be adopted in some situations but it cannot replace printed books in next twenty years.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

10.28 The only effective way to encourage energy conservation is by increasing prices of gasoline and electricity.

As we know non-renewable energy has produced pollution to the environment. Additionally it is not boundless for humans to use in industry and daily life. In order to keep non-renewable energy like gasoline, coal and reduce contamination, energy conservation should be encouraged to put into practice. Therefore there is a hot debate that whether increasing price of those non-renewable resources is appropriate. From my point of view, I do not believe that it will be effective.

Increasing prices of natural resources may bring negative consequence and cannot reach people’s support. I notice that every time government carried out the principle to enhance price of gasoline, citizens have some different ideas about it, of most are not supportive. Take my country as an example. As a developing country people prefer to pay necessities at a low prices and gasoline plays a significant role in every aspect, such as transportation and industry developed. If the price of gasoline went up, taxi industry would also raise fees for passengers to keep balance. It can cause two consequences: the first one is less people would take taxi as one of main transportation due to expensive than before; second one is to increase average income for every citizen, which can bring abundant changes in society. Government can take this police to raise price of natural resource but it is hard to put into practice with various requirements and it is definitely a huge project.

Nevertheless, other ways may be an effective method to achieve resources conservation: developing renewable energy and improving people’s consciousness about limited natural energy. With development of renewable energy, some countries have already adopted wind power and nuclear plant. That energy will not produce any pollution to the atmosphere; besides it is renewable resources that cannot be used up like non-renewable energy. Government should take effort on new energy if prefers to develop an effective way to encourage energy conservation. Utilizing new energy, non-renewable resources will be conserved.

To conclude, humans and government should adopt and consider other methods to preserve energy; only increasing price of non-renewable energy is not the most effective method to keep natural resource with the evidence above.

ice--breakerUID: 2717367

总评：句子写得很流利，几乎没什么错误。上下衔接的比较好。
不过例证不怎么充实哈。
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: z# ]) I0 [2 B. u; R* @. rIncreasing prices of natural resources may bring negative consequence and（用but） cannot reach people’s support. I notice that every time government carried out the principle to enhance price of gasoline, citizens have some different ideas about it, of most are not supportive（不能单独存在）. Take my country as an example. As a developing country people prefer to pay necessities at a low prices and gasoline plays a significant role in every aspect, such as transportation and industry developed. If the price of gasoline went up, taxi industry would also raise fees for passengers to keep balance. It can cause two consequences: the first one is less people would take taxi as one of main transportation due to expensive than before; second one is to increase average income for every citizen, which can bring abundant changes in society. Government can take this police to raise price of natural resource but it is hard to put into practice with various requirements and it is definitely a huge project.8 u2 j$ u; \2 V/ D2 w# d

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development of renewable energy, some countries have already adopted wind power and nuclear plant. That（these） energy will not produce any pollution to the atmosphere; besides it is renewable resources that cannot be used up like（as）
non-renewable energy. Government should take effort on new energy if prefers to develop an effective way to encourage energy conservation. Utilizing new energy, non-renewable resources will be conserved（前后什么关系）.: d* J1 Z  R$ k, ^- K
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To conclude, humans and government should adopt and consider other methods to preserve energy; only increasing price of non-renewable energy is not the mosteffective method to keep natural resource with the evidence above.
188# 我是chineselady

ly8768UID: 2452066

188# 我是chineselady

As we know non-renewable energy has produced(不用完成时) pollution to the environment. Additionally it is not boundless(能这样用吗？最好说traditional energy is finite.) for humans to use in industry and daily life. In order to keep non-renewable energy like gasoline, coal and reduce contamination, energy conservation should be encouraged to put into practice(这句没读懂什么意思为了保存non-renewable energy并且减少中毒，我们应该鼓励conserve energy). Therefore there is a hot debate that(that whether 只要一个) whether increasing price of those non-renewable resources is appropriate. From my point of view, I do not believe that it will be effective.

Increasing prices of natural resources may bring negative consequence and cannot reach people’s support(reach people’s support，这话不native啊). I notice that every time government carried out the principle to enhance price of gasoline, citizens have some different ideas about it, of most are not supportive. Take my country as an example. As a developing country people prefer to pay necessities at a low prices and gasoline plays a significant role in every aspect, such as transportation and industry developed. If the price of gasoline went up, taxi industry would also raise fees for passengers to keep balance. It can cause two consequences: the first one is less(fewer) people would take taxi as one of main transportation due to expensive (fee, due to是介词) than before; second one is to increase average income for every citizen, which can bring abundant changes in society(这句话没明白什么意思). Government can take this police(怎么凭空出来个police) to raise price of natural resource but it is hard to put into practice with various requirements and it is definitely a huge project.

这段从头到尾都没有讲effective way to encourage energy conservation

Nevertheless, other ways may be an effective method to achieve resources conservation: developing renewable energy and improving people’s consciousness about limited natural energy. With development of renewable energy, some countries have already adopted wind power and nuclear plant. That energy will not produce any pollution to the atmosphere; besides it is renewable resources that cannot be used up like non-renewable energy. Government should take effort on new energy if prefers to develop an effective way to encourage energy conservation. Utilizing new energy, non-renewable resources will be conserved.

这段还行

To conclude, humans and government should adopt and consider other methods to preserve energy; only increasing price of non-renewable energy is not the most effective method to keep natural resource with the evidence above.

看清你的思路了，总体想法是好的，关于第二段应该这样说比较好，raising prices is not effective, 因为影响人们正常生活，这样的政策不利于社会的发展，因此会遭到阻止。
此外，短语和表达方式有些不native，需要改进

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

不是police是policy政策...哇哇哇...这马虎滴

daisy840228UID: 2684617

187# 我是chineselady

10.27 Agree or disagree: The next twenty years from now on, students will not use printed books any more% P; P( b& H  H Presently, information era has been occupied－用得号people’s life in modern society. Advanced techniques facilitate－好 people in various ways. Electronic books, as one of new style－of reading methods already plays primary role in studying and working with －好像用for 跟贴切吧？its convenience. Therefore, there is a heated debate that whether printed books will be displaced in next two decades. I believe that reading and studying by printed books is/will－原来可以这样用 be adopted still in the future. $ |$ e) m/ q' ]0 I 9 \9 b7 K! P/ G: V7 o Definitely in some ways printed books cannot compare with new style books like E-books. Currently, young generation prefers to download or copy reading material into their MP3 player or E-phone. It is convenience－convenient and portable to take to read when they are waiting for buses and sitting on the grasses in the garden－很细节，很好. Take my E-phone as an example. I downloaded an English-Chinese dictionary and two specialized text books into my phone. It reduces my burden to carry a heavy dictionary and also I could only take limited books everyday, so when I studied in the college library, I checked my phone to gain relative information －what I need by reading books or dictionary from it. The reading materials and knowledge are the same with the printed books, but E-books make it easier to take in people’s pocket or handbag.( F1 y: c8 t- n+ g5 R & W0 x' @" ?* h However, it needs more facilities and conditions to replace printed books and that is hard to achieve in next two decades. Furthermore, for people who live in isolated areas with limited economic conditions are not reasonable to pay for those modern equipments like computer. For instance, there are many Hope Project elementary schools in my countries, which are established by non-profit organizations or government. Most of them are located－locate就好了吧？位于vt/vi in weak economy regions－economic regions. They probably just have books, notebooks, chalks and other stationeries. It is very distinguished from－好 the conditions in developed place, in －in不用了where students have videos and computers in their classrooms. Hope Project schools with limited number of computers cannot reach internet due to location－locating in isolated places. Both environmental condition and local facility confine students to use advanced reading methods, such as E-books. Hence, in next two decades, it is hard to believe that students will not use printed books any longer because that traditional reading way still plays key role in many schools.- z: l* O: q4 X( F  M2 @; G" x   t6 K, |4 `+ i, s( k2 E* fTo conclude, with the evidence from above passages, printed books will－be used by schools and students. New style－style可以不用吧 reading ways may be adopted in some situations but it cannot replace printed books in next twenty years. －结构很清晰，用词灵活丰富，我发现我跟你的关注点不同，你放在20年，我把20年看成未来，不知道是否可以。

Amber0926UID: 2555355

As we know non-renewable energy has produced pollution to the environment. Additionally it is not boundless（你想说无止境的使用时吧？endless好点） for humans to use in industry and daily life. In order to keep（用的不好，改save）
non-renewable energy like gasoline, coal and reduce contamination, energy conservation should be encouraged to put into practice. Therefore there is a hot debate that whether increasing price of those non-renewable resources is appropriate. From my point of view, I do not believe that it will be effective.
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% M% q4 A, u1 h' k1 i3 \Increasing prices of natural resources may bring negative consequence and cannot reach people’s support. I notice（不地道，find out） that every time（改成once） government carried out the principle to enhance price of gasoline, citizens have some different ideas about it, of most are not supportive. Take my country as an example. As a developing country people prefer to pay necessities at a low prices（有a有复数！注意！）
and gasoline plays a significant role in every aspect
(这句话用and 链接就是people prefer to gasoline plays a significant role in every aspect), such as transportation and industry developed. If the price of gasoline went up, taxi industry would also raise fees for passengers to keep balance（好！）. It can cause two consequences: the first one is less people would take taxi as one of main transportation due to （记得谁告诉我，说due to只接名词不接句子）expensive than before; second one is to increase average income for every citizen, which can bring abundant changes in society. Government can take this police to raise price of natural resource but it is hard to put into practice with various requirements and it is definitely a huge project.( I- |* C2 F1 o# P4 ?
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Nevertheless, other ways may be an effective method to achieve resources conservation: developing renewable energy and improving（为什么用动名词啊？这样句子只有主语了？你看看） people’s consciousness about limited natural energy. With development of renewable energy, some countries have already adopted wind power and nuclear plant. That energy will not produce any pollution to the atmosphere; besides it is renewable resources that cannot be used up like non-renewable energy. Government should take effort on new energy if prefers to develop an effective way to encourage energy conservation. Utilizing new energy, non-renewable resources will be conserved.4 g# @: Z; A6 }: Y% M8 t& A
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To conclude, humans and government should adopt and consider other methods to preserve energy; only increasing price of non-renewable energy is not the most effective method to keep natural resource with the evidence above.

太晚了，我就大致看看，其他没什么大问题。我觉得你主要问题在，说话逻辑随便，就是中国式的。你来中文省略下可以如“你滚”，而英文写作你不能“you rolling）要看主谓宾是否齐全！省略要在适当的时候~优点我就不表扬了~玩吧游戏睡觉了~

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10.29 Modern society has become more complex, so it is essential for the young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

It is true that complicated procedure can reduce effectiveness in humans’ studying and working. Especially life is very distinguished in modern society from it was in the past. People in modern time have to confront pressure with the development of society, hence in order to enhance efficiency in studying and working, I believe that young generation should have capacities to plan and organize. And more details are as follow.

Good plan and organization could save people from a disorder situation. Generally humans will lost themselves when facing various matters, which need to deal with soon. Let’s take my experience as an example. Almost every the end of semester I am in the situation that could bring me into nuts. It seems that I have numerous papers to fulfill and hundreds researches to complete. I always consider I should finish doing the other task while I was doing this one. It definitely put me in a disorder state without more detailed plan and schedule; because my mind always pushes me to the opposite way. Since I make a studying plan and organization, it prevents me from being confused. I make a list that which program is the most significant and which one is the most complicated. My plan tells me that I need to complete difficult one first, as probably it will occupy most of my energy and my time. My situation shows that the ability of planning and organizing is essential for next generation to master.

Lack of capacity to plan may cause position worse and bring dire consequence. Humans’ other ability also can be shown by his/her plans in daily life. And the leaders meanwhile would like to judge or promote employees by observing staff’s working plan like how they finish their work within limit time. That represents people’s ability to organize to keep everything clear. Young people will loss the chances to be promoted into higher position without such capacity in planning; they should learn how to make a plan and organize as it could assist them in their careers.

To conclude, with the evidence in above passages, young generation should obtain the ability to plan and organize because it will benefit in both studying and working.