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10.15教师是否应该获得跟doctors,lawyers,businessleaders一样的收入
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Teachers playsignificant role in people's life, especially for children. Their behaviors andthoughts could(can,时态要统一) have impact on students.Hence, in order to encourage teachers to devote more effort on teaching, highpaid is a good method. I believe that teachers' income should be kept in thesame level with doctors and lawyers.
开头较流畅。
  e6 J2 n, g9 @! LSome people thought(think) that it is reasonable fordoctors and lawyers to be paid more due to spending more years on universityeducation. With the advent of sever competition(不知道有没有那种说法，competitive mechanism,), nevertheless, therequirement for being teachers is(are) also enhanced a lot. Before decades, people could becometeachers in public schools only with three-year college education degrees. At present, however, theyhave to finish education for master degree in university(universities). Then their opportunities to become teachers will beincreased. Let ustake teaching position in my country as an example. With a large number ofgraduates every year, students have to work hard on their academic achievement,which could benefit them in the future career after graduation. So studentsmajored in education also need to study for master degree. My friend(最好说是一个朋友，给个名字，后面可以用代词替换), was only employed in a training centerwhile finishing her four-year college as Elementary Education major student. Training center in my countryis not as advanced as public schools with limited benefits for staff. Later my friend(she) studied for master degreein English Literature Education major in order to gain better working position.This summer, even if under economy depression, she is still accepted by apublic university in the
South part (去掉)of
my country. I claim that teacher should be encouraged topursue higher degree, first they could(can) transfer knowledge and wisdom to students; on the otherhand, they can have more opportunities to compete with those also prefer to beteachers(此句没看懂). Handsome income is a direct method toattract them to do so, besides more years’ education should be admitted byincome.举的例子没有很强的说服力。
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Meanwhile,teachers’ social position is enhanced with increasing of their salary. Likedoctors and lawyers, teachers will also have and should havereputation because children need teachers to lead them towards the right way, (and) youth need advisers’ (help) to choose their majors as well asassist them to plan for future. I believe that it will benefit studentsdirectly if teachers are more knowledgeable with higher degree. That willinfluence its country and bring it a bright future. Therefore, advanced workingposition should be represented by higher income, as it is the most direct wayto express.
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& Z) G6 b9 E: I6 BTo conclude, teachers shouldhave income as much as doctors and lawyers because it can encourage morestudents to study education and also to be good teachers for their country’sfuture.
没有太多错误，就是感觉例子说服力不足，不过已经不错了。
我觉得这篇文章很难写，特别是很难举出好的例子。

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151# 我是chineselady

The definition of success is formed(defined) by different people. Some may consider that being wealthy should be (the) sign of success; and staying with family, however, is pursued by others as being success. Hence, it depends on people’ concept to judge what their successful life. As far as I am concerned, I believed that being with family is a successful life I plan to have, but it is not easier to make it than it was in the past.

把话题细化挺好的

Advanced facilities in modern society benefit people in their studying and working. Researching(research就好了) related(related to) information on internet for the paper could reduce students’ time (spent) on looking for(searching information 后面lib那个就不要了) it in library or bookstore. Besides, it offers people business opportunities with both domestic and overseas online market. My cousin, graduated two years ago, did not find a good-paid job, so started running an online store with his friends. Comparing with shopping mall, online store saves my cousin and his friends’ cost due to free rent fees. It causes product and goods cheaper in their store. Through two years managing and arranging, their store has already brought benefits and he could make more money than the good-paid working position in his mind. My cousin meanwhile has planned to have run another store on EBay. My cousin’s example shows that facility in modern society assist people who think being wealthy to achieve a success, which had never happened in old times.

你的中心句是说成功的定义为和家人待在一起，可你这里却说网上商店的成功。有些偏离中心思想啊

Affluence material life could attract many humans to struggle; however, family unity as my definition to success should be pursued. I trust that family is the most significance in this world because it encourages me, helps me and loves me, from which I could feel I am not lonely in this world. Also family gives me pulse and reason to endeavor. Under this sever(severe) competition society, people’s relation has become tense. It also includes the one between parents and descendants. Due to more hours in company, it is not available for most modern people to arrange time with family. Let’s take an American movie as (an) example. It names(is named) Charles and His Chocolate Factory. Charles finally quitted accepting reward, the chocolate factory, because he could not see his family any more if having it. His words touched my heart as increasing numbers people have no time visiting parents in order to make more money. Modern society not brings convenience to people but also blur relationship between family and work.
我觉得重点应该在论述为什么现在比以前更加难和家人在一起，而不是说成功的意义在于和家人在一起

To conclude, it depends on people’ definition of success to decide it is easier or not to make a success in modern time. For me, I claim that present busy life limit people’s relation with family, which is a successful life I prefer.
总体文字能力都有较大的提升。只是这次论证的方式好像不是很合理

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10.16 years from now, people will have more leisure time


Leisure time is not balanced with income. Generally people have more time due to not have a busy work to make money; for those who have to keep work position do not have leisure time to enjoy because they prefer working almost every minute avoiding from being fired. Hence, with the advent of violent competition in this society and better living condition humans pursue, I believe that people will not have more leisure time years from now.

It is true that young people are busy with future working position so have no leisure time to enjoy. In my country, with increasing number of population, competition in job positions has become more serious. Let us take our college students as example. In order to get good-paid job after graduation, besides busy with academic learning, they have to study other programs such as basic computer skills, practice second foreign language and having an internship. One of my friends majors in Law devotes many time to struggle with lawyer’s certificate. In additional, he spends hours on English studying to take LSAD next year. In my country, increasing number of people study law and competition is serious, which made him decide to improve himself by studying in U.S. In fact, even if he passed LSAD, what he will confront is another busy life because it is not easy to get used to an environment in another country. Young generation have seldom had leisure time due to preparing for their future, otherwise they will be lagging behind. I claim that with the tendency of more population, youngster will face and have busier life in decades.

For those already work under this severe competition society, to keep and get promote become essential parts in their life. The economy depression happened last year reminded people that even if working for a famous company like BMW, it could not give them a security life. Let us see my friend who studies law again. He does not want to be lost in this social competition, which made me to make up mind to study in abroad. After finishing his degree in the States, comparing with others from same major, he should not be fired with better oversea studying background and strong English ability. For people who are already in working position, they have gained pressure from this environment. They also need to fulfill themselves through studying and getting more experience in order not to be out while younger generation graduates. Presently, most humans have to confront a busy life because all of them want to have their situations in society.

To conclude, humans still work hard or study new knowledge to improve themselves even if in leisure time. Therefore, with more tight competition, people will not have more leisure time currently and later.

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10.16 years from now, people will have more leisure time

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Leisure time is not balanced with income. Generally people have more time due to not have a busy work to make money; for those who have to keep work position do not have leisure time to enjoy because they prefer working almost every minute avoiding from being fired（avoid 后面不用being哦）. Hence, with the advent of violent competition in this society and better living condition humans pursue, I believe that people will not have more leisure time years from now.

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It is true that young people are busy with future working position so have no leisure time to enjoy. In my country, with increasing number of population, competition in job positions has become more serious. Let us take our college students as example. In order to get good-paid job after graduation, besides busy（besides being busy） with academic learning, they have to study other programs such as basic computer skills, practice second foreign language and having(have和前面平行) an internship. One of my friends majors in Law devotes many time to struggle with lawyer’s certificate. In additional, he spends hours on English studying to take LSAD（LAST，这是谁啊？哈哈） next year. In my country, increasing number of people study law and competition is serious, which made him decide to improve himself by studying in U.S. In fact, even if he passed LSAD, what he will confront is another busy life because it is not easy to get used to an environment in another country. Young generation have seldom had leisure time（2个谓语？） due to preparing for their future, otherwise they will be lagging behind. I claim that with the tendency of more population, youngster will face and have busier life in decades.

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For those already work under this severe competition society, to keep and get promote become essential parts in their life. The economy depression happened last year reminded people that even if working for a famous company like BMW, it could not give them a security life. Let us see my friend who studies law again. He does not want to be lost（lose是输，be lost是迷路） in this social competition, which made me to make up mind to study in abroad. After finishing his degree in the States, comparing with others from same major, he should not be fired with better oversea studying background and strong English ability. For people who are already in working position, they have gained pressure from this environment. They also need to fulfill themselves through studying and getting more experience in order not to be out while younger generation graduates. Presently, most humans have to confront a busy life because all of them（because they） want to have their situations（貌似status更好，或者climb the social ladder） in society.) ?. u  [$ T) P* B

To conclude, humans still work hard or study new knowledge to improve themselves even if (if不需要，even if是连词)in leisure time. Therefore, with more tight（tighter） competition, people will not have more leisure time currently and later.

语法错误有些多，还是留时间检查一下（我看OG上说4分的就是语法错误太多才不给5分的）、
内容没什么问题。只是第三段有些内容是重复的。

继续加油！已经不错了~

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10.17 To truly understand world event, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information.

Presently, humans are involved in an information era. Nothing could be done without any medias because people need to learn news and related information for working and studying. Television, as one of necessary medias plays an important role in providing knowledge and news. Comparing to newspapers, I believe that television program benefits people more in various ways. And more details are in the following passages.

Television programs, with their vivid pictures and signs attract people and win their trust. There are varied programs currently designed to cater for people’s different tastes. Let us take television programs in my country as example. Almost every local television station has Talk Shows to analysis hot topics or social position. Every time famous people/experts are invited to have conversation, which provide people chances to better understand the present social phenomenon. When people watched the image from the screen and listened to their talking, they would trust what they saw and what they heard, which newspaper cannot achieve. Besides, newspaper cannot keep that much information with limited spaces. The exciting conversation and vivid pictures gain people’s trust because it is a direct and obvious method to learn news. That reminds an old saying: seeing is believing.

Newspaper also has its advantages in news and information offering, but for some reasons, it cannot replace television in people’s hearts. That is true that some people are used to reading newspaper to learn what is happening in this world in the morning. In modern society, especially under this busy life, however, there are other ways humans could learn news in early of a day. Right now, every television station has morning news program for people to listen to news while preparing and having breakfast. It could save people’s time by doing two things in limited time. They do not need to take a couple of minutes on reading. In additional, buses are also having small television set, which is more convenient for those are too busy to watch at home.

To conclude, television program is and will be a valuable and convenient method for people to learn news. With its benefits and specific program like Talk Show, television directly attracts humans to watch news from it.

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10.17 To truly understand world event, we should get our news from newspaper; television cannot provide enough information.

Presently, humans are involved in an information era. Nothing could be done without any medias(media是medium的复数) because people need to learn news and related information for working and studying. Television, as one of necessary medias plays an important role in providing knowledge and news. Comparing to newspapers, I believe that television program benefits people more in various ways. And more details are in the following passages.
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( i( p- J, T: E. ~- x: v: \( qTelevision programs, with their vivid pictures and signs attract people and win their trust. There are varied programs currently designed to cater for people’s different tastes.(好) Let us take television programs in my country as example. Almost every local television station has Talk Shows to analysis hot topics or social position. Every time famous people/experts are invited to have conversation(s), which provide people chances to better understand the present social phenomenon. When people watched the image from the screen and listened to their talking, they would trust what they saw and what they heard, which newspaper cannot achieve. Besides, newspaper cannot keep that much information with limited spaces. The exciting conversation and vivid pictures gain people’s trust because it is a direct and obvious method to learn news. That reminds an old saying: seeing is believing.

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Newspaper also has its advantages in news and information offering, but for some reasons, it cannot replace television in people’s hearts. That is true that some people are used to reading newspaper to learn what is happening in this world in the morning. In modern society, especially under this busy life, however, there are other ways humans could learn news in (the) early of a day. Right now, every television station has morning news program for people to listen to news while preparing and having breakfast. It could save people’s time by doing two things in limited time. They do not need to take a couple of minutes on reading. In additional(addition), buses are also having(这个时态有点别扭) small television set, which is more convenient for those are too busy to watch at home.
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结构不错，语言也很少出现错误，中间段写的也不错。
不足的是第三段写得有点跑，题目是谁能provide enough information,而作者第三段写了TV在时间上的方便性，只要再点上一句切一下题就好了。
结尾段也要点一下题~

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170# 我是chineselady

Presently, humans are involved in an information era. Nothing could be done without any medias because people need to learn news and related information for working and studying. Television, as one of necessary medias plays an important role in providing knowledge and news. Comparing to newspapers, I believe that television program benefits people more in various ways. And more details are in the following passages.

这段写的不错

Television programs, with their vivid pictures and signs attract people and win their trust. There are varied programs currently designed to cater for people’s different tastes. Let us take television programs in my country as example. Almost every local television station has Talk Shows to analysis(analyze) hot topics or social position. Every time famous people/experts are invited to have conversation, which provide people chances to better understand the present social phenomenon. When people watched the image from the screen and listened to their talking, they would trust what they saw and what they heard, which newspaper cannot achieve. Besides, newspaper cannot keep that much information with limited spaces. The exciting conversation and vivid pictures gain people’s trust because it is a direct and obvious method to learn

例子不错

Newspaper also has its advantages in news and information offering, but for some reasons, it cannot replace television in people’s hearts. That is true that some people are used to reading newspaper to learn what is happening in this world in the morning. In modern society, especially under this busy life, however, there are other ways humans could learn news in early of a day. Right now, every television station has morning news program for people to listen to news while preparing and having breakfast. It could save people’s time by doing two things in limited time. They do not need to take(spend) a couple of minutes on reading. In additional, buses are also having small television set, which is more convenient for those are too busy to watch at home.

To conclude, television program is and will be a valuable and convenient method for people to learn news. With its benefits and specific program like Talk Show, television directly attracts humans to watch news from it.
你这篇写得比以前都好，有论证也有例子，坚持这种风格应该没问题的

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10.19 该重视学习concepts &ideas呢，还是重视学习facts呢？

Learning has gone through people’s whole life, from studying in kindergarten to university. Like an old saying goes: to live, to learn, humans have to study concepts and ideas as well as learning facts to gain knowledge the whole life. Hence, it brings a questioning situation that whether concepts and ideas are more necessary in getting knowledge. Holding the point of concepts and ideas as foundation part, some may consider that they are the first step to gain learning. However, I believe that facts, instead of concepts and ideas should be focused in first hand.

Children need to acquire and get familiar with daily knowledge and environment around them. When my friend’s daughter pretended to feed a baby doll with hot water, my friend stopped her and taught her the consequence of play with hot water. Even if humans are mature enough to comprehend the concept and idea, they still have to experience it by facts to further understand. Let us take back my friend’s daughter as example. She caught the idea from her mother that hot water could hurt her, but she still pretended to feed her doll with a cup with full of hot water while her mother was in kitchen. The little girl may not think how hot water would hurt her before tried. Just like the idea and the fact, people learn idea and concept from text books or other method. It is the first step. Actually, they could not deeply understand it without facts by experiencing in person or watching/observing others.

When study in middle school or college as students, especially in my country, learning concept and idea cannot be avoided. But what we should master is the fact rather than ideas. I still remembered how we learnt math in middle school. At very beginning, we were obliged to master those math concepts, which could not make us better understand complex procedure. I did not really master it until got involved in to know and learn the fact by practicing and considering. Concepts and ideas are the foundation and surface to learn the fact. They play significant role in learning but not as essential as fact because it is the fact that makes people including children and adults to master what we should learn.

To conclude, learning facts to gain/master wisdom and knowledge is what people pursue. Ideas and concepts could assist people to understand its surface; hence it is more primary that people need to learn fact to get understanding.

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10.19 该重视学习concepts &ideas呢，还是重视学习facts呢？

Learning has gone through people’s whole life, from studying in kindergarten to (the也不是很确定要不要加，不过看起来有点怪吧)university. Like an old saying goes: to live, to learn, humans have to study concepts and ideas as well as learning facts to gain knowledge the whole life. Hence, it brings a questioning situation that whether concepts and ideas are more necessary in getting knowledge. Holding the point of concepts and ideas as foundation part, some may consider that they are the first step to gain learning. However, I believe that facts, instead of concepts and ideas should be focused in first hand.

Children need to acquire and get familiar with daily knowledge and environment around them. When my friend’s daughter pretended to feed a baby doll with hot water, my friend stopped her and taught her the consequence of playing with hot water. Even if humans are mature enough to comprehend the concept and idea, they still have to experience it by facts to further understand. Let us take back my friend’s daughter as example. She caught the idea from her mother that hot water could hurt her, but she still pretended to feed her doll with a cup with full of hot water while her mother was in kitchen. The little girl may not think how hot water would hurt her before tried（trying）. Just like the idea and the fact, people learn idea and concept from text books or other method. It is （just语气强烈些吧） the first step. Actually, they could not deeply understand it without facts by experiencing in person or watching/observing others. （这句觉得用not。。until。。写也不错）我觉得那个例子可以精练一点说，而且最后一次说完。看完前半部分例子，觉得没说明什么，看到后面才明白。觉得可以连在一起说呢。O(∩_∩)O~

When studying in middle school or college as students, especially in my country, learning concept and idea cannot be avoided. But what we should master is the fact（加s跟后面一致好些） rather than ideas. I still remembered how we learnt math in middle school. At very beginning, we were obliged to master those math concepts, which could not make us better understand complex procedure. I did not really master it until got involved in to know and learn the fact by practicing and considering. （这个从句写的好绕啊。建议搞直白一点。什么带进事实来实践和考虑，直接搞成put into practica之类的吧。带进。。。觉得搞的太复杂了呢）Concepts and ideas are the foundation and surface to learn the fact. They play significant role in learning but not as essential as fact加s保持和concepts和ideas的一致好些 because it is the fact that makes people including children and adults to master what we should learn.觉得这一段和上一段的意思是一样的。就是通过学习facts能更要掌握知识。上一段写的是更深刻地体会到concepts和ideas，这一段也差不多的意思，没太分开呢

To conclude, learning facts to gain/master （个人觉得这种东西还是少一点出现吧。自己写的时候也不太敢写这种/的）wisdom and knowledge is what people（people这个词这么用显得很Chinglish啊。用we，they，或者we human beings都好些） pursue. Ideas and concepts could assist people to understand its surface; hence it is more primary that people need to learn facts to get understanding. 这个有点问题。我也没有十足把握，就不乱改了，花姐再查下吧

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paragraph one : humans have to study concepts and ideas as well as learning facts to gain knowledge of the whole life.

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    Learning has gone（用goes会不会好点？过去式表示的是已经过去的东西） through people’s whole life, from studying in（这个不需要了） kindergarten to university. Like an old saying goes: to live, to learn, humans have to study concepts and ideas as well as learning facts to gain knowledge the whole life.（那个saying真的是这么说的？我有点怀疑哦） Hence, it brings a questioning situation that whether concepts and ideas are more necessary in getting knowledge. Holding the point of concepts and ideas as foundation part, some may consider that they are the first step to gain learning. However, I believe that facts, instead of concepts and ideas should be focused in first hand.(表达很好，但是开篇略长，考试的时候怕时间不够哦)



Children need to acquire and get familiar with daily knowledge and environment around them. When my friend’s daughter pretended to feed a baby doll with hot water, my friend stopped her and taught her the consequence of play with hot water. Even if humans are mature enough to comprehend the concept and idea, they still have to experience it by facts to further understand. Let us take back(这样说有点中式，用again吧，放在example后面) my friend’s daughter as example. She caught the idea from her mother that hot water could hurt her, but she still pretended to feed her doll with a cup with full of hot water while her mother was in kitchen. The little girl may not think how hot water would hurt her before tried（it did）. Just like the idea and the fact, people learn idea and concept from text books or other method. It is the first step. Actually, they could not deeply understand it without facts by experiencing in person or watching/observing others.(我觉得你的段落中心是很明确了，但是这段的描述方式比较冗长。可以适当精简一下的。)
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    When study in middle school or college as students, especially in my country, learning concept and idea(这才是前面的主语，那个study不能用在这个主语后面。简单来说，这句语法有问题。) cannot be avoided. But what we should master is the fact rather than ideas. I still remembered how we learnt math in middle school. At very beginning, we were obliged to master those math concepts, which could not make us better understand complex procedure. I did not really master it until got involved in to know and learn the fact by practicing and considering. Concepts and ideas are the foundation and surface to learn the fact. They play significant role in learning but not as essential as fact because it is the fact that makes people including children and adults to master what we should learn.（其实说来说去，都是想表达facts帮助理解concepts，你可以不说那么多，只用一个很详细的例子说明。比如说你学三角函数，开头学不懂，然后看到很多实际模型，才懂。等等。你现在的表达显得不是那么有说服力）



To conclude, learning facts to gain/master wisdom and knowledge is what people pursue.（这个是怎么总结出来的？？） Ideas and concepts could assist people to understand its surface; hence it is more primary that people need to learn fact to get understanding.（挑不出错，但是觉得很别扭）

你的文章其实形式比较新颖，因为你的中心句在段末。虽然很多阅读的文章都是这样，但是我觉得这样做比较危险。读者很难迅速把握你的中心意思，所以在读你段落的时候很迷茫

另外，你的例子还不够具体，或者说不够有说服力。

最后，就是你在展开内容的时候经常不断重复一个内容。表达有点累赘。我觉得还是传统的那种文章结构比较好：中心句，进一步解释中心句，举例，总结。

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Learning has gone through(accompany) people’s whole life, from studying in kindergarten to university. Like an old saying goes: to live, to learn, humans have to study concepts and ideas as well as learning facts to gain knowledge the whole life. Hence, it brings a questioning situation that(不要that 只用whether就行) whether concepts and ideas are more necessary in getting knowledge. Holding the point of concepts and ideas as foundation part, some may consider that they are the first step to gain learning. However, I believe that facts, instead of concepts and ideas should be focused(focused on) in first hand.

Children need to acquire and get familiar with daily knowledge and environment around them. When my friend’s daughter pretended(pretend不如用play game to feed) to feed a baby doll with hot water, my friend stopped her and taught her the consequence of play(ing) with hot water. Even if humans are mature enough to comprehend the concept and idea, they still have to experience it by facts to (have a further understanding)further understand. Let us take back my friend’s daughter as example. She caught the idea from her mother that hot water could hurt her, but she still pretended to feed her doll with a cup with full of hot water while her mother was in kitchen. The little girl may not think how hot water would hurt her before tried. Just like the idea and the fact, people learn idea and concept from text books or other method. It is the first step. Actually, they could not deeply understand it without facts by experiencing in person or watching/observing others.

有说服里

When (people,这里可不能省略主语)study in middle school or college as students, especially in my country, learning concept and idea cannot be avoided. But(尽量避免用but, however, nevertheless, whereas) what we should master is the fact rather than ideas. I still remembered how we learnt math in middle school. At very beginning, we were obliged to master those math concepts, which could not make us better understand complex procedure. I did not really master it until got involved in to know and learn the fact by practicing and considering. Concepts and ideas are the foundation and surface to learn the fact. They play (a) significant role in learning but(注意but) not as essential as fact because it is the fact that makes people including children and adults to master what we should learn.

最后两句应该合成一下Admittedly, concepts and ideas are the foundation and surface to learn the fact, and they play (a) significant role in learning; nevertheless it is not as essential as fact because it is the fact that makes people including children and adults to master what we should learn.

To conclude, learning facts to gain/master wisdom and knowledge is what people pursue. Ideas and concepts could assist people to understand its surface; hence it is more primary that people need to learn fact to get understanding.
你这篇写的很不错～

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10.20
People will spend less time in cooking and preparing food in 20 years later. Do you agree or disagree? 天啊..有史以来最长的文章了(近500). 本来想计时的,写了一半就又去水了..咳万恶的旧社会

Most people may consider that due to fast-speed life in modern society, cooking is/will be replaced in next decades. In particular, new style food, such as convenience rice and fast food reduces people’ time on food prepared and cooked. However, I believe that even if more processed food assists humans in this busy world, people will still spend more time on cooking and preparing food. And more details are as follow.

Taking time on cooking for family members, friends and guests is a good way to show love, appreciation and feeling to them. Consider this: when visiting or joining a party, the food there were all processed and purchased from supermarket; I do not trust that the host or hostess really cared about this activity and respect visitors. It does not matter if holder’s cooking is not prefect; what humans are concerned is his/her attitude to them. Take my experience as example. This summer vacation I got involved in an internship and also needed to study for GRE, which decreased my lunch time from one hour to 40 minutes. In order to keep healthy and save my time, my boyfriend cooked and prepared every meal for me. So I could have fresh lunch and dinner directly. I know that he definitely prepared lunch much earlier than I thought; at the time when I was studying in library, he already went to market to buy vegetable or meat. He just hoped I could have good and healthy meal because I needed energy in working and learning. Homemade food is more tasty and healthier than the one in college cafeteria. His cooking may not as perfect as a chief, I would like to have every day in every meal because it was his way to present his love and feeling to me. That cannot be replaced by any processed food.

Presently, humans are more concerned about eating habits and food. Even if convenient and fast food could assist people for a couple of times, it is not a wise method to adopt for a long time. As we know that processed food is made of additives that are no any nutrition. Due to being healthy as foundation, people in modern society embark on cooking in a scientific way, such as appropriate time to put salt and other seasonings. Firstly, it really needs time to master and practice; on the other hand, it takes people’s time to prepare it, choosing materials and buying fresh vegetable. Additionally, the TV program of cooking is popular and sometimes they have cooking competition, which attract more humans to join in. Television program and social culture still focus on eating habit. And cooking and preparing domestically is and will be playing significant role in people’s life.

To conclude, taking time to cook a meal will not be replaced in next two decades due to cooking has its benefit in people’s life. It can improve humans’ relation and also avoid having additives from food not homemade.

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Most people may consider that due to fast-speed life in modern society, cooking is/will be replaced in next decades. In particular, new style food, such as convenience rice and fast food reduces people’（people's） time on food prepared(preparing) and cookedI(cooking). However, I believe that even if more processed food assists humans in this busy world, people will still spend more time on cooking and preparing food. And more details are as follow.
Taking time on cooking for family members, friends and guests is a good way to show love, appreciation and feeling to them. Consider this: when visiting or joining a party, the food there were all processed and purchased from supermarket; I do not trust that the host or hostess really cared about this activity and respect visitors. It does not matter if holder’s cooking is not prefect; what humans are concerned is his/her attitude to them. Take my experience as example. This summer vacation I got involved in an internship and also needed to study for GRE, which decreased my lunch time from one hour to 40 minutes. In order to keep healthy and save my time, my boyfriend cooked and prepared every meal for me. So I could have fresh lunch and dinner directly. I know that he definitely prepared lunch much earlier than I thought; at the time when I was studying in library, he already went to market to buy vegetable or meat. He just hoped I could have good and healthy meal because I needed energy in working and learning. Homemade food is more tasty and healthier than the one in college cafeteria. His cooking may not as perfect as a chief, I would like to have every day in every meal because it was his way to present his love and feeling to me. That cannot be replaced by any processed food.

Presently, humans are more concerned about eating habits and food. Even if convenient and fast food could assist people for a couple of times, it is not a wise method to adopt for a long time. As we know that processed food is made of additives that are no any nutrition. Due to being healthy as foundation, people in modern society embark on cooking in a scientific way, such as appropriate time to put salt and other seasonings. Firstly, it really needs time to master and practice; on the other hand, it takes people’s time to prepare it, choosing materials and buying fresh vegetable. Additionally, the TV program of cooking is popular and sometimes they have cooking competition, which attract more humans to join in. Television program and social culture still focus on eating habit. And cooking and preparing domestically is and will be playing significant role in people’s life.
To conclude, taking time to cook a meal will not be replaced in next two decades due to cooking has its benefit in people’s life. It can improve humans’ relation and also avoid having additives from food not homemade.

文章字数非常amazing，第一个reason的举例很好很贴近生活，不过太长了，导致相比而言感觉第二个reason的例子就不那么具体和充足。另外，有些表达还有些重复，可以反复再斟酌一下。