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10.11Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place

People choose the place they live based on their dreams and personalities. Some may prefer to live in one area within whole life while others would move for some reasons. Therefore, whether humans should live in the city or country, in depends on their specific characters.

Generally, young generation have inclination to move to coastal cities due to opportunities for better working positions. Especially for those from small village, their desires to move out should be stronger than others. Take my country as an example. Coastal and large cities are first working destinations of graduates after their graduation. Metropolis, with its developed economy and famous corporations attract many excellent young people. My cousin’s husband, from the west part of my country presently lives with my uncle’s family in a big city. He has worked for IBM as a software engineer since graduated. He majored in Science of Computer and has capacity to develop software. From his perspective, moving to developed economy area could assist him to fulfill what he studies in college and practice him through working in IBM.

Moving to city could benefit most youngsters; however, it is not appropriate for advanced people. Let us take my country as example again. While old people already got familiar with one place, they still have no desire to move even if new city will have better living condition. It is our culture that humans are like leaves returning back to hometown when get old. Besides, the old have special feeling to the place where they belong to and it may not be proper for them to move to any cities. Sometimes, I heard some old people refused to move out to live with their sons or daughters in big city when invited. They were invited for one reason is that better condition and more entertainment are in city; secondly, it is part of our country’s culture to take care of parents when they are old. In this situation, they may fell hurtful if leave for the area already have feeling. Hence, I support the old should live in the place within whole life instead of as young generation do.

To conclude, living in one place within one’s whole life is not available for anyone. People should choose the de according to their feelings and what kind of work they pursue.

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136# 我是chineselady

People choose the place they live based on their dreams and personalities. Some may prefer to live in one area within whole life while others would move for some reasons. Therefore, whether humans should live in the city or country, in（删去） depends on their specific characters.



Generally, young generation have inclination to move to coastal cities due to opportunities for better working positions. Especially for those from small villages, their desires to move out should(would) be stronger than others. Take my country as an example.（前面是说small villages，后面却用我的国家来举例，似乎不太合适） Coastal and large cities are first(superior) working destinations of(for) graduates after their graduation. Metropolis, with its developed economy and famous corporations attract（我有点记不清metropolis是不是单复数同型，这里不知道该不该用单三形式呢） many excellent young people. My cousin’s husband, from the west part of my country presently lives with my uncle’s family in a big city. He has worked for IBM as a software engineer since graduated(graduation). He majored in Science of Computer and has the
capacity to develop software（可以这么说吗？）. From his perspective, moving to developed economy(an economically developed) area could assist him to fulfill(enable him to practise) what he studies(has learned) in college and practice(exercise) him through working in IBM.

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Moving to city could benefit most youngsters;（先简要回顾上文内容好像是ETS喜欢的模式^_^） however, it is not appropriate for advanced people. Let us take my country as example again. While old people already got familiar with one place, they (will) still have no desire to move even if new city will have(provides) better living condition.（这个条件句你似乎把主句和从句搞反了。。。） It is (due to) our culture that humans are like leaves returning back to hometown when get old.（这个落叶归根翻译得太不地道了。。。不如试试It is due to our culture which believe in people should like falling leaves settle on the roots when they grow old） Besides,（后面其实是解释这个文化底蕴的，用besides不合适吧） the old have special feelings to(for) the place where they belong to and it may not be proper for them to move to any (other) cities. Sometimes, I heard some old people refused to move out to live with their sons or daughters in big city (even) when (warmly) invited. They were invited for one reason is that(first because of the) better condition and more entertainment are（删去） in (the) city; secondly, it is part of our country’s culture to take care of parents when they are old(and the second reason is, also according to our culture, to take care of parents when they are old is the responsibility of any grown-ups). In this situation, they may fell(felt) hurtful if (they have to) leave for（删去） the area (they) already have feelings. Hence, I support the idea that the old should live in the place within whole life instead of as young generation do（这里的表达也有点奇怪。。。）.

To conclude, living in one place within one’s whole life is not available（用这个词不合适吧？试试suitable） for anyone(everyone). People should choose the de(make their decisions) according to their feelings and what kind of work(life) they pursue.


第一次给翠花改，所以改得比较仔细，把看得不舒服不得体的表达基本上都顺了一下。。。
不过我们对这题的理解好像有差异。。。
文章结构肯定是没有问题，TS也都写得很到位，也有事例支持，就是表达上经常有些不地道。。。有一点小小建议，多练习下事例的写法叙事的语言，这是ETS喜欢看到的

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10.12 getting university education is the most important factor for success
思想在驰骋...导致严重超时

Being successful is most people’s dream. But what I prefer to mention at every beginning is different people may have various definitions about success. Some consider that university education should play crucial role in being successful. However, I do not believe that college education is necessary.

University education generally provides students chances to learn fact to understand specific knowledge. Being a doctor, a respectable position needs more years in academic studying and internship. Others may think doctors are successful with handsome income and advanced social reputation. Comparing to doctor, hairdresser does not have to study in college because training and technical school could assist them to learn this skill. But it cannot say that hairdressers are not successful due to lacking college education. One of my friends’ brother, a hairdresser is enjoyed his working. He has the feeling of successful when helped the old to have hair cut in nursing home. Most of old people there are not available to go out and really appreciate him. My friend’s brother has a colorful life, working every evening in hair salon and visiting those old people every month. He gains a sense of achievement as long as saw he could bring happiness and convenience for people who in need. Based on his experience, I support that hairdresser has a successful life even though never been to college.

People have dissimilar concepts about being successful. Some may regard money and power as important elements for success; some may think staying with family should be wonderful they need to pursue. I learnt a story from a magazine that who has successful life? The story tells about the descendents of two families. One lives in American as an engineer and the other just lives in the same community with his parents as an auto mechanic. Every holiday, the son in U.S. would send a card to say greeting, but with a busy life in another country, he could not come back when his father was in hospital for sickness. For the other guy, however, due to live close to origin family, he can visit his parents frequently. Particularly parents needed to be cared, because it is easy for old to be lonely with time passing by. So this story shows successful life cannot be judged by college education. For most old people, they would feel sense of achievement when saw every family member staying healthy and visiting each other.

To conclude, a successful life should not be decided by higher education, because it depends on humans what kind of life they prefer.

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第二次第三次也要仔细啊...就仔细一次不干...;P 137# larcwing

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People choose the place they live based on their dreams and personalities. Some may prefer to live in one area within whole life while others would move for some reasons. Therefore, whether humans should live in the city or country, in （删去，或者换个副词也行如totally）depends on their specific characters.

Generally, young generation have inclination to move to coastal cities due to opportunities for better working positions. Especially for those from small village(villages), their desires to move out should be stronger than others. Take my country as an example. Coastal and large cities are first working destinations of graduates after their graduation (多余了)( graduates choose to work in coastal and large cities is quite common nowadays ). Metropolis, with its developed economy and famous corporations attract many excellent young people. My cousin’s husband, from the west part of my country presently lives with my uncle’s family in a big city. He has worked for IBM as a software engineer since graduated. He majored in Science of Computer and has capacity to develop software(感觉这两句 关系不大呢). From his perspective, moving to developed economy （多余了）area could assist him to fulfill what he studies（studied） in college and practice him through working in IBM.

Moving to city could benefit most youngsters; however, it is not appropriate for advanced people. Let us take my country as example again. While old people already got familiar with one place, they still have no desire to move even if new city will have better living condition. It is our culture that humans are like leaves returning back to hometown when get old (Though a tree grows ever so high, the falling leaves return to the ground, similarly as human being ). Besides, the old have special feeling to the place where they belong to and it may not be proper for them to move to any cities. Sometimes, I heard some old people refused to move out to live with their sons or daughters in big city when invited(多余了). They were invited for one reason is that better condition and more entertainment are there in city; secondly, it is part of our country’s culture to take care of parents when they are old(这一句应该 再从年轻人的角度 来论证 他们应该 留下来照顾老年人 就很好了，要不然就会显得有点 唐突). In this situation, they may fell hurtful if leave for the area already have feeling. Hence, I support the old should live in the place within whole life instead of as young generation do.)

To conclude, living in one place within one’s whole life is not available for anyone. People should choose the de according to their feelings and what kind of work they pursue.

观点很好，但最好用你自己熟悉的表达方式可能比较好。

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137# larcwing

People choose the place (where) they live based on their dreams and personalities. Some may prefer to live in one area within whole life(;) while others would move for some reasons. Therefore, whether humans should live in the city or country, in(没有in depends的说法吧，depending on) depends on their specific characters.

Generally, young generation have inclination to move to coastal cities due to opportunities for better working positions(好像中心句应该是在不同地方，而不是愿意到其它城市). Especially for those from small village(s), their desires to move out should be stronger than others. Take my country as an example. Coastal and large cities are first working destinations of graduates after their graduation(Coastal and large cities are the first choice for students to work after they graduate). Metropolis, with its developed economy and famous corporations attract many excellent young people. My cousin’s husband, from the west part of my country(Western China) presently lives with my uncle’s family in a big city. He has worked for IBM as a software engineer since graduated. He majored in Science of Computer and has capacity to develop software. From his perspective, moving to (加个various，
说明不在同一个地方) developed economy area could assist him to fulfill what he studies in college and practice him through working in IBM.

Moving to city could benefit most youngsters; however, it is not appropriate for advanced(older, advanced先进的) people. Let us take my country as example again. While old people already got familiar with one place, they still have no desire to move even if new city will have better living condition. It is our culture that humans are like leaves returning back to hometown when get old(that people who left at young time are likely to return to hometown when get old). Besides, the old have special feeling(close tie) to the place where they belong to and it may not be proper for them to move to any cities. Sometimes, I heard some old people refused to move out to live with their sons or daughters in big city when invited. They were invited for one reason is that better condition and more entertainment are in city; secondly, it is part of our country’s culture to take care of parents when they are old. In this situation, they may fell hurtful if leave for the area already have feeling. Hence, I support the old should live in the place within whole life instead of as young generation do.

To conclude, living in one place within one’s whole life is not available for anyone. People should choose the de according to their feelings and what kind of work they pursue.

这篇比上篇的好，句子的问题还是要解决的

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哇困死了 明天改单词

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Being successful is most people’s dream. But what I prefer to mention at every beginning is different people may have various definitions about success.（这句和后面的句子连接的不太好） Some consider that university education should play crucial role in being successful. However, I do not believe that college education is necessary.

University education generally provides students chances to learn fact（多余了） to understand specific knowledge. Being a doctor, a respectable position needs more years in academic studying and internship. Others may think doctors are successful with handsome income and advanced social reputation. Comparing to doctor, hairdresser does not have to study in college because training and technical school could assist them to learn this skill. But it cannot say that hairdressers are not successful due to lacking college education. One of my friends’ brother, a hairdresser is enjoyed his working. He has the feeling of successful when helped the old to have hair cut in nursing home. Most of old people there are not available to go out and really appreciate him. My friend’s brother has a colorful life, working every evening in hair salon and visiting those old people every month. He gains a sense of achievement as long as saw he could bring happiness and convenience for people who in need. Based on his experience, I support that hairdresser has a successful life even though never been to college.（最后一句有点语法问题）

People have dissimilar concepts about being successful. Some may regard money and power as important elements for success; some may think staying with family should be wonderful （缺宾语？） they need to pursue. I learnt a story from a magazine that who has successful life?（？） The story tells about the descendents of two families. One lives in American as an engineer and the other just lives in the same community with his parents as an auto mechanic. Every holiday, the son in U.S. would send a card to say greeting, but with a busy life in another country, he could not come back when his father was in hospital for sickness（可以不要吧）. For the other guy, however, due to live close to origin family, he can visit his parents frequently. Particularly parents needed to be cared, because it is easy for old to be lonely with time passing by. So this story shows successful life cannot be judged by college education.（这句和题目对应不太上） For most old people, they would feel sense of achievement when saw every family member staying healthy and visiting each other.

To conclude, a successful life should not be decided by higher education, because it depends on humans what kind of life they prefer.

例子和论据很新颖，不过有些地方和题目扣的不太紧，注意句子和句子间的联系，有一些莫名其妙的语法问题

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常常有人说我的句子好像是自己发明的...呜呜呜 144# spy

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137# larcwing

Being successful is most people’s dream. But what I prefer to mention at every beginning is (that) different people may have various definitions about success. Some consider that university education should(这个好像不是should) play crucial role in being successful(success好了). However, I do not believe that college education is necessary.

University education generally provides students chances to learn fact(fact是什么意思) to understand specific knowledge. Being a doctor, a respectable position needs more years in academic studying(study) and internship. Others may think doctors are successful with handsome(handsome没有来形容income的吧) income and advanced social reputation(advanced reputation？？). Comparing to doctor, hairdresser does not have to study(students does not have to) in college because training and technical school could assist them to learn this skill. But it cannot say that hairdressers are not successful due to lacking college education. One of my friends’ brother, a hairdresser is enjoyed(people enjoy sth) his working. He has the feeling of successful(succeed, of后面+名词 ) when helped(helping) the old to have hair cut in nursing home. Most(most不是代词) of old people there(不要) are not available to go out and really appreciate him. My friend’s brother has a colorful life, working every evening in hair salon and visiting those old people every month. He gains a sense of achievement as long as saw he(saw he?这个语法有问题吧) could bring happiness and convenience for(to) people who (are) in need. Based on his experience, I support that hairdresser has a successful life even though never been to college.

(建议加上连词)People have dissimilar concepts about being successful. Some may regard money and power as important elements for success; some may think staying with family should be wonderful(这里应该是个名词) they need to pursue. I learnt a story from a magazine that who has successful life?(怎么是问句) The story tells about the descendents of two families. One lives in American as an engineer and the other just lives in the same community with his parents as an auto mechanic. Every holiday, the son in U.S. would send a card to say greeting, but with a busy life in another country, he could not come back when his father was in hospital for sickness. For the other guy, however, due to live close to origin family, he can visit his parents frequently. Particularly parents needed to be cared, because it is easy for old to be lonely with time passing by. So this story shows successful life cannot be judged by college education(这个也没怎么说success啊). For most old people, they would feel sense of achievement when saw every family member staying healthy and visiting each other.

To conclude, a successful life should not be decided by higher education, because it depends on humans what kind of life they prefer.

这篇确实有些天马行空了。而且错别字和语法要注意啊

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Being successful is most people’s dream. But what I prefer to mention at every(very) beginning is different people may have various definitions about success. Some consider that university education should play crucial role in being successful. However, I do not believe that college education is necessary.

University education generally provides students chances to learn fact（fact指什么？） to understand specific knowledge. Being a doctor, a respectable position needs more years in academic studying and internship. Others may think doctors are successful with handsome（这个怪怪的。。。decent比较好吧） income and advanced(higher) social reputation. Comparing to doctor, hairdresser does not have to study in college because training and technical school could assist them to learn this skill. But it(you) cannot say that hairdressers are not successful due to lacking college education. One of my friends’ brother, a hairdresser is enjoyed his working(enjoying his work). He has the feeling of successful(success) when helped(helping) the old to have their hair cut in nursing home. Most of old people there are not available(able) to go out and(so they) really appreciate him. My friend’s brother has a colorful life, working every evening in hair salon and visiting those old people every(once a) month. He gains a sense of achievement as long as saw（这个saw是啥？） he could bring happiness and convenience for people who (are，who引导从句) in need. Based on his experience, I support that hairdresser has(people can have) a successful life even though never been to college.

（连接词）People have dissimilar concepts about being successful. Some may regard money and power as important elements for success; some may think staying with family should be wonderful(what) they need to pursue. I learnt a story from a magazine that who has successful life?（从句不能是问句啊。。。） The story tells about the descendents of two families. One lives in American as an engineer and the other just lives in the same community with his parents as an auto mechanic. Every holiday, the son in U.S. would send a card to say greeting, but with a busy life in another country, he could not come back when his father was in hospital for sickness. For the other guy, however, due to live close to origin family, he can visit his parents frequently. Particularly parents needed to be cared, because it is easy for old to be lonely with time passing by. So this story shows successful life cannot be judged by college education. For most old people, they would feel sense of achievement when saw every family member staying healthy and visiting each other.（这个例子既没说他们都没上过大学，也没说清楚他们如何成功。。。而且还是杂志上看来的故事。。。怎么看都没有说服力啊。。。）

To conclude, a successful life should not be decided by higher education, because it depends on humans what kind of life they prefer.

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翠花姐，加油~~~:)

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10.13 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago

Generally people’s view of life is formed based on the changing of environment and society. Parents and their descendents from different times do not have similar ideas on one situation. Particularly technology has been developed dramatically in recent decades; generation gap is wider than it was in 50 years ago. Hence, I do not believe that parents understand their children.

Different living condition and renovation of technique influence people’s view of world. Parents and children cannot always reach an agreement; therefore it’s hard for parents to know their children. Let’s take young generation’ life as example. Dealing with many things on internet has becoming popular among them and it can say that internet is part of young people’s study and work. Shopping online, keeping in touch with friends by MSN also paying various kinds fees through internet bank all these show that young generation have a distinguished life from parents. Parents, with limited computer knowledge may not get used to this style. When I ordered Vietnam’s coffee from online store, my mother was really worried about that I might not receive anything. Or it might be a trap. In fact, the online store website already has security to protect both buyers and sellers, such as EBay, one of the largest and most popular store website. Most time parents could not understand why children would like to chat with internet friends and pay daily fees online; because parents never enjoyed convenience and benefit from computer and internet at early ages. Therefore, they cannot really understand children’ life and behaviors.

On the other hand, before five decades, global economy and industry developed in a slow step, especially just after World War two. Under similar position, parents and their descendants should keep same perspective about world and life: to survive. Take my parents as example. Five decades ago, the social turbulence had impact on them as my country was going through a hard time. My parents in their childhood confronted poverty and famine. From psychologists we learnt that experience people passed through in childhood would affect them the whole life. Unit now, even if our life is much better in advanced living condition, saving money is till a must to prevent poverty. Young generation, however already get load by credit card, which will not be supported by parents.

To conclude, due to different historical and social background, parents are hard to understand children as they are almost from different world.

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10.13 The parents do not understand their children as well today as parents understood their children 50 years ago


Generally people’s view of life is formed based on the changing of environment and society. Parents and their descendents from different times do not have similar ideas on one situation. Particularly technology has been developed dramatically in recent decades; generation gap is wider than it was in 50 years ago. Hence, I do not believe that parents understand their children（这一句作为MP要抓住比较级）.7 W

Different living condition and renovation of technique influence people’s view of world. Parents and children cannot always reach an agreement; therefore it’s hard for parents to know their children. Let’s take young generation’ life as example. Dealing with many things on internet has becoming popular among them and it can say that internet is part of young people’s study and work. Shopping online, keeping in touch with friends by MSN （and）also paying various kinds fees through internet bank all these（这里我不太确定，感觉前面有三个有动名词作主语，再加一个all these有点奇怪）
show that young generation have（has较好，毕竟generation是单数形式） a distinguished life from parents. Parents, with limited computer knowledge（，）插入语是不是要再加个逗号啊 may not get used to this style. When I ordered Vietnam’s coffee from online store, my mother was really worried about that I might not receive anything. （；）这两句连接性还蛮强的Or it might be a trap. In fact, the online store website already has security to protect both buyers and sellers, such as EBay, one of the largest and most popular store website. Most time parents could not understand why children would like to chat with internet friends and pay daily fees online; because parents never enjoyed convenience and benefit from computer and internet at early ages. Therefore, they cannot really understand children’ life and behaviors.（这个差别说得好啊，有很好的对比，但是有点罗嗦了。建议开头可以直接说网络的发展导致gap增大，然后举例切入两代人对网上购物的态度，再总结这只是众多实例的一个而已，呼应TS说正是这些看似琐碎的事情让父母更难了解孩子）

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On the other hand, before five decades, global economy and industry developed in a slow step, especially just（不太喜欢这个just……） after World War two. Under similar position, parents and their descendants should keep same perspective about world and life: to survive.（如果说是环境所迫的话，应该后来是因为环境好了，所以父母和孩子可以自由选择自己喜欢的生活方式，导致差异；而后面举例是说童年差异的话，就应该在前面说是因为当时社会发展比较慢，两代人的观念差不多吧） Take my parents as example. Five decades ago, the social turbulence had impact on them as my country was going through a hard time. My parents in their childhood confronted poverty and famine. From psychologists we learnt that experience people passed through in childhood would affect them the whole life. Unit now, even if our life is much better in advanced living condition, saving money is till（still） a must to prevent poverty. Young generation, however already get load by credit card, which will not be supported by parents.（感觉这段的TS不够突出，如果开段就说现在父母与小孩的童年差异大于50年前父母和小孩的童年差异，导致现在父母子女之间观念分歧更大，然后再说原因，举例子，结构会更清晰些）

To conclude, due to different historical and social background, parents（today）
are hard（harder）
to understand children as they are almost from different world.（结尾赞~）

不好意思今天上课刚回来，改晚了。
两个点抓得很好，展开的也很充分，很值得好好学习呀。需要重视的是TS不够突出，说话有点罗嗦。

PS，为什么我从word上粘过来，字体颜色都没了……囧