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What is the purpose of the education? The answer is students are obliged to absorb, also practice(practice knowledge? employ knowledge into practice) the knowledge they learnt. It produces people another question(produce sb sth? 没这种说法吧): is 11 months studying(study是名词) an effective method to master the knowledge? I believe that students need to have a rest instead of studying continuously. Therefore, 11 months learning is not reasonable.(11用 eleven好点)

The effective way to master knowledge is to practice after learning. It needs time to fulfill it. Students will not practice the skills learnt from classes without internships or past-time(part-time job) jobs, which could make them forget their knowledge(这个定于从句挺ambiguous的). Take my working experience as example. I majored in elementary education in college and teaching experience, for me, however, plays a significant role in my future. 11 months studying in college could limit my experience, which will not benefit my career after graduation. Meanwhile, school of education(university or college education) encourages students to find part-time job in some training schools(training center or agency，那种算不了学校，就是个培训机构), to teach children English or math. School also assists us to have internship in public school. My three months teaching experience, in last summer, provided me a value(valuable) opportunity to practice myself, besides, it made me better understand children’s behavior. My working experience supports that students should join in society by working instead of only studying for 11 months.

这段再说，如果学11月，就没时间实习了，会更加有说服力

Too much studying could bring pressure for students and they may feel stressful. 11 months learning in college occupies students’ spare time that they will be frustrated due to losing chance to share with friends and contact with relatives as well as enjoy life. On the other hand, students cannot absorb knowledge well if study for a long time without having a rest like doing any exercising or sport. Students need to relax or release themselves by entertainment. In addition, traveling also could offer them knowledge, such as history, local culture and nations. Therefore, they definitely need time to enjoy and go out of campus.

这段不错

To conclude, 11 months is too much for students because it limits their chances to practice themselves in society. Education should not use this ineffective way to impart knowledge. Hence, 11 months learning cannot be adopted.

注意语法，第一次限时写，这样很不错，但不能自己创造语法啊。

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For instance, those people who have occupation income do work--怎个意思 for more than 11 months a year.


额  For instance, those people （who have occupation income ）do do 表强调 好像是这样的嘿嘿 work for more than 11 months a year.

我是写了之后才发现我的论点不好写  只有硬着写了

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10.6 Government should pay more attention on health care issues than on environmental issues.
紧赶着写还是超10分钟

Health care, as a major and primary issue plays a significant role in citizens’ life in every country. People have security to protect themselves when got sick. Environment issue, however, also should be considered. But for some governments, especially for those developing countries, it may not be available to spend all money on both. Hence, I believe that health care issue should be fulfilled priority due to overweight.

Humans should be put on the top of whole creatures, even if environment is still important in people’ life. Some may deliberate that it will benefit humans’ living condition in a non-polluted environment. From my perspective, however, it needs decades to achieve and still needs people to make efforts on it. Health care cannot be lagged behind only because of keeping natural atmosphere. Take my grandmother’s experience as example. Last summer, she got cancer and needed to have operation. In my country, expense in hospital costs a sum of money. Without health care, a big operation could lead to a family bankrupt. So my grandmother did not spend a lot on her operation under assist of health care. Some of others, however, who cannot enjoy its benefit for some reasons, will confront two situations: pay by themselves if they are affluent, or just keep the present state. It is not difficult to learn from TV program that children, with heart attack disease from poor families probably would miss the best time to cure. Therefore, health care should be established and achieved first because it can save people.

The country I was born in is a developing country so health care has not been that perfect. We could see that government has already struggled on this issue. For instance, every corporation is obliged to give its staff health care, but still some small companies try to avoid it. Health care, as one of major benefits should be supported and considered in first grade. The reason is, people currently from lower middle class are facing such problem: not dare to go to hospital with very limited money.

To conclude, humans should be cared first because it does not sound reasonable to pay more attention on environment issue and put health care aside.

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10.5 一年至少上课11个月，可以更好更有效地学习。同意这种说法吗？
急忙的写还是超了10分钟哇...


What is the purpose of the education? The answer is students are obliged to absorb, also pra ...
我是chineselady 发表于 2009-10-6 13:31

What is the purpose of the education? The answer is students are obliged to absorb, also practice the knowledge they learnt. It produces people another question: is 11 months' studying an effective method to master the knowledge? I believe that students need to have a（enough） rest instead of studying continuously. Therefore, 11 months' learning is not reasonable.

The effective way to master knowledge is to practice after learning. It needs time to fulfill it. Students will not practice the skills learnt from classes without internships or past-time jobs（need internships or past-time jobs to practice the skills learnt from classes）, which could make them forget（淡忘，fade） their knowledge. Take my working experience as example. I majored in elementary education in college and teaching experience, for me, however, plays a significant role in my future. 11 months' studying in college could limit my experience, which will not benefit my career after graduation. Meanwhile, school of education encourages students to find part-time job in some training schools, to teach children English or math. School also assists us to have internship in public school. My three months' teaching experience, in last summer, provided me a value（valuable） opportunity to practice myself, besides, it made me better understand children’s behavior. My working experience supports that students should join in society by working instead of only studying for 11 months.（翠花mm近期待改进的是~~外语表达不准确，不急着考试的话，建议先不限时）

Too much studying could bring pressure for students and they may feel stressful. 11 months' learning in college occupies students’ spare time that they will be frustrated due to losing chance to share with friends and contact with relatives as well as enjoy life. On the other hand, students cannot absorb knowledge well if study for a long time without having a rest like doing any exercising or sport. Students need to relax or release themselves by entertainment. In addition, traveling also could offer them knowledge, such as history, local culture and nations. Therefore, they definitely need time to enjoy and go out of campus. （限时写，字数不够平衡，需要拓展）

To conclude, 11 months is too much for students because it limits their chances to practice themselves in society. Education should not use this ineffective way to impart knowledge. Hence, 11 months' learning cannot be adopted.

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10.6 Government should pay more attention on health care issues than on environmental issues.
紧赶着写还是超10分钟

Health care, as a major and primary issue plays a significant role in citizens’ ...
我是chineselady 发表于 2009-10-6 22:05

Health care, as a major and primary issue plays a significant role in citizens’ life in every country. People have security to protect themselves when got sick. Environment issue, however, also should be considered. But for some governments, especially for those developing countries, it may not be available to spend all money on both. Hence, I believe that health care issue should be fulfilled priority due to overweight（什么意思啊……overweight，超重）.

Humans should be put on the top of whole creatures,（极不符合美国文化，建议大改为“人类应该尊重环境，爱护其他物种，但由于财政预算……”） even if environment is still important in people’ life. Some may deliberate that it will benefit humans’ living condition in a non-polluted environment. From my perspective, however, it needs decades to achieve and still needs people to make efforts on it. Health care cannot be lagged behind only because of keeping natural atmosphere. Take my grandmother’s experience as example. Last summer, she got cancer and needed to have operation. In my country, expense in hospital costs a sum of money. （建议加上 in my country,）Without health care（health care 和 insurance 意义不等同，建议补充：insurance是health care的重要组成部分，without insurance, ...）, a big operation could lead to a family bankrupt. So my grandmother did not spend a lot on her operation under assist of health care（So, ... 不是完整的一句话，需按语法修改）.

（建议分段，平衡段落）Some of others, however, who cannot enjoy its benefit for some reasons, will confront two situations: pay by themselves if they are affluent, or just keep the present state. It is not difficult to learn from TV program that children, with heart attack disease from poor families probably would miss the best time to cure. Therefore, health care should be established and achieved first because it can save people. （贫困居民的医疗补助）

The country I was born in is a developing country so health care has not been that perfect. We could see that government has already struggled on this issue. For instance, every corporation is obliged to give its staff health care, but still some small companies try to avoid it.（指的是insurance吧，同样需要指出是insurance而不是笼统的health care） Health care, as one of major benefits should be supported and considered in first grade. The reason is, people currently from lower middle class are facing such problem: not dare to go to hospital with very limited money.

To conclude, humans should be cared first because it does not sound reasonable to pay more attention on environment issue and put health care aside.
（医疗补助的例子扣题；翠花mm需要改进段落结构，建议多参考范文）

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呵呵 10月5日的也修改了
记得看呐:loveliness:

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谢谢2009!!:victory: 很认真的改的说. overweight..是我表达的有问题,我是想说更重要, 记得有个词是over开头的...但是想不起来咯..呜呜呜怎么办 112# 2009toefl10

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Health care, as a major and primary issue plays a significant role in citizens’ life in every country. People have security to protect themselves when got sick. Environment issue, however, also should be considered. But for some governments, especially for those developing countries, it may not be available to spend all money on both. Hence, I believe that health care issue should be fulfilled(好像没有fulfill priority的说法) priority due to overweight.

Humans should be put on the top of whole creatures, even if environment is still important in people’ life. Some may deliberate that it will benefit humans’ living condition in a non-polluted environment. From my perspective, however, it needs decades to achieve and still needs people to make efforts on it. Health care cannot be lagged behind only because of keeping natural atmosphere. Take my grandmother’s experience as example. Last summer, she got cancer and needed to have operation. In my country, expense in hospital costs a sum of money. Without health care, a big operation could lead to a family bankrupt. So my grandmother did not spend a lot on her operation under assist of health care. Some of others, however, who cannot enjoy its benefit for some reasons, will confront two situations: pay by themselves if they are affluent, or just keep the present state. It is not difficult to learn from TV program that children, with heart attack disease from poor families probably would miss the best time to cure. Therefore, health care should be established and achieved first because it can save people.

这段还不错。就是例子可以短点

The country (that) I was born in is a developing country so health care has not been that perfect(is not that perfect就可以了). We could see that government has already struggled on this issue. For instance, every corporation is obliged to give its staff health care(insurance), but still some small companies try to avoid(escape from) it. Health care, as one of major benefits should be supported and considered in first grade(in first place). The reason is, people currently from lower middle class are facing such problem: not dare(hesitate) to go to hospital with very limited money.

To conclude, humans should be cared first because it does not sound reasonable to pay more attention on environment issue and put health care aside.


还不错，在表达准确性上有待提高，有不少自造词汇，呵呵

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今天的听写作业

The nobel price in physics goes to Chales (Kao) and--of standard of communications (Labs) in the England and (the) Chinese unversity of HK and Gergeo Smith in miller of boil of the labs of--in Newjersy--jersey. Calcium--Kao figured out how to transfered--transmit the light (over) long distances in optical glass of friberies--fibers. From the official anouncement "today more than a billion kilometers of all--optical glass friber around the world forms the backbone. More than--of modern global communication."

In 1964--1969我怎么听是1964?,   boil may use--made your digital camera possible divide finding--by inventing the charge a couple--coupled of advices-devices, the CCD."This deviced allows the extraordinary--electronic recording (of) images. and (it) replaces the photographic films in cameras. on the CCD, records the image as (a) distibution of charge in small sells--cells of pigsos--or pixels. And it outputs the images of digital numbers as the serious--a series of digital numbers. The CCD is a crucial component of dance--advanced cameras and it finds numerous applications in scienfic (and) medical equipment. For example, it gives us a-the pectacular images of (the) universe. That we can see today.

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optical 视觉的, 视力的, 与光学有关的
fiber 纤维的,纤维细胞. 韧性
pixel 像素(计算机科学)

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10.7 Technology cause children show less creative than they were in past.
作文写到一半时突然困了, 困的不行就睡了20分...汗..这作文写的

Since modern society provides abundant advanced facilities and technologies, humans life become more comfortable than decades ago. People’s thinking and behaviors are distinguished in this new style living environment, including dreams, norms and pursuit. With enjoying the convenience from modern technology, I believe that children’s creative ability further improved because they benefit from those modern developed facilities.

Based on scientific data, children born in newly era are smarter than those from last generation. Decades ago, lacking of electronic toys and games, children’s mind was limited to gain achievement perfectly. What they had just some simple ones like wooden pistols and metal trains without long railways. Currently, under modern and better society, children are immerged into a different world from before. For instance, a child-style car provides any kids opportunities to be little drivers, which may make them create a new regulation for traffic to benefit children. Children also image to receive gift from their grandparents or to send cookies to friends by using colorful telephone toy. Utile now, the most advanced telephone could allow users to see each other; probably in the future, one of those children would invent newly style phone that can send goods like fax does.

Earlier education organization assists children to develop their intellect with professional teachers and modern technology. Researchers, presently support that foundation education plays significant role in children’s logical capacity improvement. A friend of mine who has a four-year old daughter registered in a famous earlier education training center. She learnt some games to practice children’s cooperation and creativity, such as drawing pictures of their dreams and considering new regulation or plan to kindergarten; also fix small technical device toy. Those activities could guide children to image and deliberate in a right direction. Children are next generation/future of one country, so earlier education system is developed by using modern facilities.

To conclude, modern technology does not limit children’s creative ability. With advent of advanced facilities and living condition, children’s creation is encouraged and promoted.

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10.8
是telephone 还是television对人类的有more effects

As significant modern facilities, both telephone and television play important roles in human’s daily life. But if it comes to a question that which one has more effect on people and people’s life, I believe that telephone, with its merit and convenience, influence people deeply. And more details are as follow.



It was telephone that is narrow the distance between people live in far areas. In ancient time, people needed to go on horseback when had emergency news. Even if the destination was not far, it still could deferred by many troubles, such as bad weather and undeveloped pathway. Phone provides the chance to transfer urgent message and information in current society. For instance, every country has its emergent phone No. to resolve problem and save life like calling for police station and hospital. Last spring, my neighbor’s apartment was on fire. Within five minutes, firemen and fire trucks arrived and put out the fire. Obviously, some one just gave them a call to transfer and describe this dangerous situation. Without telephone, taking massage by driving or riding may become one of methods people could choose. But other neighbors would get involved in this fire situation if firemen could not have appeared in such a short time. Additionally, overseas students could say greeting to their families by phone calls. Traditionally, they may have gone to post office to mail their letters. Since increasing people use telephones, greeting by phone has become more popular, effective and essential in people’s life than any other communication tools.



Television, as one of entertainments, also has its advantages. In the evening, people could learn what happened in the world through television program over dinner. Family members can discuss the main idea of the news or TV show, which may enhance their relationship. However, there are other modern facilities and technologies occupying humans’ life. The news on internet, generally, is the latest; besides, most people need to use internet in their working position. Hence, the impact of television on people’s lifestyle is not as strong as telephone. The reason is other facilities like internet, radio broadcast all could replace TV in some sense. Comparing with benefits of telephone, television is kind of weak.

To conclude, it is telephone has more influence on people in modern society because it can transfer massage immediately, to show greetings and tell information others need.