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Which should be supported for nation’s development, transportation or access internet? This is controversy(controversial 应该是形容词). In my point of view, I believe that both will assist one country’s improvement; and they cannot be separated. Available transportation promotes cooperation(,加个停顿要好点) and internet helps to gain related information. Both play key roles in modern society.(最后一句和both will assist one country’s improvement重复了)

As a newly industry, internet provides increased(increasing) businesses. Online store are becoming popular among young generations. However, it cannot work without expressed(想说快递吧，convenient方便的就可以) delivery. People, going shopping on internet are too busy to purchase in persons(by themselves); or they are attracted by those various and unique products on internet stores.(应该把这些放在however前面好些) The online store owners, generally, utilize expressed speed companies to delivery product. For instance, the transportation was deficient in the west part of my country before. Even if those who lived in the west preferred to purchase from internet stores, it would take more days to transfer. Additionally, it would be charged a lot compared to the normal price. That was not reasonable to have a deal on internet.(internet买来的东西也需要transportation来运输) Since last year, the railway has been developed in the west. So it enhances the speed of traveling there, and even in isolated villages, they also could receive goods from further places within three days. Transportation encourages presumption on internet stores, nevertheless, the stores owners would lose clients in further area and people who live there cannot enjoy this lifestyle and services.

似乎和本段的中心句不符合啊，后面怎么说起交通来了

Development cannot leave internet, because it offers a platform for interaction. Corporations prefer having(不用having) advertisement and introduction on their websites, which extends opportunities to attract cooperators or buyers. Currently, internet saves time and decreases the procedures for companies’ routines. Like filling employment forms and sending personal materials by email, HR department could select qualified ones to have final interviews. It avoids those who are incompetent and improves the working efficiency. On the other hand, internet application saves people’s time to head towards companies frequently to send documents.


To conclude, for any countries, if they would like to develop their nation’s competence, both internet and transportation should be enhanced. From my perspective, access internet and advanced transportation would bring advantages for one nation’s development. Hence, they should be improved on the same boat.

这次有些逻辑问题啊，需要解决，还有语法问题

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Serious movies or entertain ones?

Which kind of movies could attract humans, serious or entertain ones? Since silence movies assisted to reduce people’s pressure during World War two, movies has become one of key entertainments in people’ life. Under modern society, some population may prefer to watch serious movies because it reflects active or negative sides of the world. However, I believe that the function of entertain movies is overweight and more details are as follow.

Nowadays, people have heavier pressure confronting present situations, such as severe competition and overworking. Entertain movies could help them to decrease with its funny characters. Take my experience as example. I work as an office assistance in an American company, and am obliged to answer phones from clients. That is challenging for me as I have never know who should be the next. Additionally, those various official tasks make me stressful; I would get depression if cannot release it as soon as possible. However, when the moment I am attached into comedy movies, every piece of frustration from my working position is gone. Shriek, a funny big monster put me in a relaxed environment meanwhile I was attracted by that entertained and silly story. From then on, those kinds of movies have become part of my life because it decreases my pressure and helps me to release myself and laugh.

Serious movies probably express some phenomenon about current society. It adopts special figures or stories to show the negative part of human nature or side effect of society. One movie about the children’s life in isolated mountain impressed me, and also makes me deliberate. Those born in undeveloped areas lost their opportunities to be educated. Due to deficiency in local agriculture, they needed to leave families and schools at very young ages. People would be touched as well as be regretful for them. From my perspective, serious movies like that one could arouse people’s empathy; at the same time, I will be worried and concerned about people lived in related places. Because of already having pressure from my work, I prefer to have entertainment by watching movies instead of gaining increased stress.

To conclude, entertain movies can decrease humans’ frustration, which serious ones cannot achieve. Hence, with my experience in the passages, entertain movies are pretty necessary to people, as it is one method of amusement.

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比起你我很惭愧，学校里的作业很多，课也很多，经常是把当天的口语和写作完成就是目标了！~~打算十一期间向某版主学习！我们一起加油哦！

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Let us raise a toust--toast to champion--champagne and you bet it was--its ubiquitous bubbles. Because the new researchers say new bubbles arenot jsut tickling with your taugh. There--they are ruping--erupting with romance--aromas vital to the taste to--of the beverage.

A team of who wells--else, a French researchers used the math back tromitry..?--mass spectrometry to nose around a glass of champion. They found the concentrations of the certain circular--molecular compunds were higher at the face--surface of the glass than in the liquid of itself. They reported the finding in the preceedings of the national academic sciences.

The scientists say the sea shares champion--champagne's secret. IF the beverage--youve ever enjoyed the ocean air its because the compouds called suf fighten--surfactants than was drave--are dragged along to--with the bubbles in the waves. When those pubbles were burst, this fact--surfactants breaks into smaller mollar moled--molecules called every source--aerosols that are suspended in the breathe--breeze. Giving a closed...to the gears stink to--coastal areas their distinctive the ocean--oceany the odor. In essence, a glass of champion-champagne hosts of small versions of this process but the bubbles bring more advertising--appetizing area salts--aerosols to the surface.

Legion-legend has it that down pair young shouted at i am tasting the stars when young c-he uncorked..the first bottle of champion-champagne. But it was a physical-s in-and chemisty not the astronomy that was really sharing--savoring.

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champagne: 香槟酒 (知道这个词就是拼写错了呜呜呜)
[b]ubiquitous: 无处不在的
erupting: 爆发的
aroma: 香气(G词汇)
spectrometry: 光谱仪
molecular: 分子的;基本结构的(阅读可以看听力听不出哇)
surfactant: 表面活化物质
aerosol: 气雾剂
uncork: 透露
savoring: 有味道的

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顶花姐

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Which kind of movies could attract humans, serious or entertain ones? Since silence movies assisted to reduce people’s pressure during World War two, movies has become one of key entertainments in people’ life. Under(In modern society) modern society, some population may prefer to watch serious movies because it reflects active or negative sides of the world. However, I believe that the function of entertain movies is overweight and more details are as follow.

Nowadays, people have heavier pressure confronting present situations, such as severe competition and overworking. Entertain movies could help them to decrease with(这里不用加 with) its funny characters. Take my experience as example. I work as an office assistance in an American company, and (I am说全点好像更好听点) am obliged to answer phones from clients. That is challenging for me as I have never know who should be the next. Additionally, those various official tasks make me stressful; I would get depression if cannot release it as soon as possible. However, when the moment I am attached into comedy movies, every piece of frustration from my working position is gone. Shriek, a funny big monster put me in a relaxed environment meanwhile I was attracted by that entertained and silly story. From then on, those kinds of movies have become part of my life because it decreases my pressure and helps me to release myself and laugh.

这种方法…恩，提到entertain movie部分太少了

Serious movies probably express some phenomenon about current society. It adopts special figures or stories to show the negative part of human nature or side effect of society. One movie about the children’s life in isolated mountain impressed me, and also makes me deliberate. Those born in undeveloped areas lost their opportunities to be educated. Due to deficiency in local agriculture, they needed to leave families and schools at very young ages. People would be touched as well as be regretful for them. From my perspective, serious movies like that one could arouse people’s empathy; at the same time, I will be worried and concerned about people lived in related places. Because of already having pressure from my work, I prefer to have entertainment by watching movies instead of gaining increased stress.

这段好像没有把主题句在开头点明吧

To conclude, entertain movies can decrease humans’ frustration, which serious ones cannot achieve. Hence, with my experience in the passages, entertain movies are pretty necessary to people, as it is one method of amusement.

这个还是把主题句点明的好

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Good looks and dresses are more important for success than good ideas.

Can good looking and dresses cause people to be successful? Some may consider that it is a primary element to achieve. However, appearance like clothes only shows the outside instead of inner part. Therefore, I believe good idea could assist people to gain success; and more details are as follow.

Good idea represents humans’ wisdom and being successful cannot leave it. People who prefer to have achievement need to consider how to complete rather than based on what kind of clothes they are in. For instance, one of my friends, an online store owner, spent more time thinking effective method to enhance his business. It took him around ten hours a day to decorate and manage the products in his store; he finally realized the progress of improvement of store and a good idea came to him by those days’ working. From then on, he visited some related websites of fashion to chat with people online or have investigation. Because he was weight-lost produce seller and there must be more females who choose to lose weight in fashion website. Due to his enthusiastic and friendly personality, the number of clients was booming. That promoted his business, besides, those people could introduce his goods to their friends as losing weight is part of females’ culture; they are always not satisfied with their shapes. My friends’ experience illustrates people need good/proper idea to gain achievement.

Pretty clothes and good looking could show how people look like, which is different from being successful. Young generation prefer to be in stylish clothes to present their characters. As most people known, moral does not allow people to judge others according to appearance. Hence, humans should focus on producing good ideas because it is the key road for them to gain achievement.

To conclude, with the evidence in above massages, in order to success, good ideas should be encouraged not pursuing clothes or other appearance.

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Can good looking and dresses cause people to be(不用to be了) successful? Some may consider that it is a primary element to achieve. However, appearance like clothes only shows the outside instead of inner part(我觉得这样说比较好shows not the inner part but the outside). Therefore, I believe good idea could assist people to gain success; and more details are as follow.

Good idea represents humans’ wisdom and being successful cannot leave it. People who prefer to have achievement need to consider how to complete rather than based on what kind of clothes they are in. For instance, one of my friends, an online store owner, spent more time thinking effective method to enhance his business. It took him around ten hours a day to decorate and manage the products in his store; he finally realized the progress of improvement of store and a good idea came to him by those days’ working. From then on, he visited some related websites of fashion to chat with people online or have investigation. Because he was weight-lost produce seller and there must be more females who choose to lose weight in fashion website. Due to his enthusiastic and friendly personality(这个和idea无关), the number of clients was booming. That promoted his business, besides, those people could introduce his goods to their friends as losing weight is part of females’ culture; they are always not satisfied with their shapes. My friends’ experience illustrates people need good/proper idea to gain achievement.

Pretty clothes and good looking could show how(what) people look like, which is different from being successful. Young generation prefer to be in stylish clothes to present their characters. As most people known, moral does not allow people to judge others according to appearance. Hence, humans should focus on producing good ideas because it is the key road for them to gain achievement.


To conclude, with the evidence in above massages, in order to success, good ideas should be encouraged not pursuing clothes or other appearance.

这篇到时挺围绕中心句的，呵呵。有个不足之处就是感觉两个观点分配的内容不均，一个太多，一个太少，看着不好看啊。还有例子虽然很好，但是理论论证也不可少啊。感觉在这方面还是可以提高的

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Can good looking and dresses cause people to be successful? Some may consider that it is a primary element to achieve. However, appearance like clothes only shows the outside instead of inner part. Therefore, I believe good idea could assist people to gain success; and more details are as follow.(我怎么抽风 写了个反面呢)

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Good idea represents humans’ wisdom and being successful cannot leave it（and后面的这半截有点中国）. People who prefer to have achievement need to consider how to complete rather than based on what kind of clothes they are in. For instance, one of my friends, an online store owner, spent more time thinking effective method to enhance his business. It took him around ten hours a day to decorate and manage the products in his store; he finally realized the progress of improvement of store and a good idea came to him by those days’ working. From then on, he visited some related websites of fashion to chat with people online or have investigation（这个有点怪怪）. Because he was weight-lost produce seller and there must be more females who choose to lose weight in fashion website.（这句和前面不太连贯） Due to his enthusiastic and friendly personality, the number of clients was booming. That promoted his business, besides, those people could introduce his goods to their friends as losing weight is part of females’ culture; they are always not satisfied with their shapes. My friends’ experience illustrates people need good/proper idea to gain achievement.

Pretty clothes and good looking could show how people look like, which is different from being successful. Young generation prefer to be in stylish clothes to present their characters. As most people known, moral does not allow people to judge others according to appearance. Hence, humans should focus on producing good ideas because it is the key road for them to gain achievement.

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To conclude, with the evidence in above massages, in order to success, good ideas should be encouraged not pursuing clothes or other appearance.
翠花是不是写的很赶啊，感觉第二个理由没太写完一样。

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Which kind of movies could attract humans, serious or entertain ones? Since silence movies assisted to reduce people’s pressure during World War two, movies has become one of key entertainments in people’ life. Under modern society, some population （很少这样用哈）may prefer to watch serious movies because it （和前面的复数不对应呢）reflects active or negative sides of the world. However, I believe that the function of entertain movies is overweight and more details are as follow

Nowadays, people have heavier pressure confronting present situations, such as severe competition and overworking. Entertain movies could help (relieve）  them（from those problems） to decrease with  its funny characters. Take my experience as example. I work as an office assistance in an American company, (that my job is to answer phones from clients) and  am obliged to answer phones from clients. That is (really ) challenging for me as I have never know who should be the next. Additionally, those various official tasks make me stressful, and  that if not release immediately i would doutless come to depression. would get depression if cannot release it as soon as possible. However, when the moment I am attached into comedy movies, every piece of frustration from my working position is gone. Shriek, a funny big monster put me in a relaxed environment meanwhile I was attracted by that entertained and silly story. From then on, those kinds of movies have become part of my life because it decreases my pressure and helps me to release myself and laugh(放在这里 很容易误解为 release laugh).

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Can learning the past assist to solve problems and have value for present? The answer is yes. Definitely I believe that knowledge from past could avoid negatives. And more details and evidence are as follow.

As the foundation of one country, education could be fulfilled by learning culture from the past. Every nation has its own history and wisdom, which is treasure from ancestors. For instance, since in elementary school, students are instructed morals based on Confucius. It teaches how to respect and care about parents and people who are elder. Such as do not go to further places since parents are still waiting at home, because they will be worried when their next generation left. There are plenty of wise proverbs from Confucius. Firstly, it reduces humans’ energy to develop deeper thinking; secondly it provides the best texts for education. It transfers what kind of friends youngster should make through the proverbs that prevent youngster from being with ungracious people. SO learning knowledge from the past is valuable for education.

The past could alarm people to consider the future. Take my country’s history as example. With splendid ancient culture, civilization and wealth, our nation was trampled in World War two. It shows that we are obliged to develop our nation into a modern as well as developed society and to protect our territory. From the history, the power of our country and government was weak, and then lagged behind. That was the main reason being invaded. The bloody and crude experience stimulates us to be strong. That period of history has impressed us deeply. However, the progress we have achieved currently, explains that we gained improvement and completed the development for humans’ life and living condition. Nevertheless, history should be focused on in the development of country; the reason is that people should learn adequate knowledge and information to culture a new nation appropriately to match nation’s style.

To conclude, what idea and knowledge from the past can help people in different ways. It offers some wise principles for both humans and their nations.

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Can learning the past assist to solve problems and have value for present? （这句好像有语法问题）The answer is yes. Definitely I believe that knowledge from past could avoid negatives（negatives用在这里不太好）. And more details and evidence are as follow.

As the foundation of one country, education could be fulfilled by learning culture from the past. Every nation has its own history and wisdom, which is （are？） treasure from ancestors. For instance, since in elementary school, students are instructed morals based on Confucius. It teaches how to respect and care about parents and people who are elder. Such as do not go to further places since parents are still waiting at home, because they will be worried when their next generation left. There are plenty of wise proverbs from Confucius. Firstly, it reduces humans’ energy to develop deeper thinking; secondly it provides the best texts for education. It transfers what kind of friends youngster should make through the proverbs that prevent youngster from being with ungracious people. SO learning knowledge from the past is valuable for education.  

The past could alarm people to consider the future. Take my country’s history as example. With splendid ancient culture, civilization and wealth, our nation was trampled in World War two. It shows that we are obliged to develop our nation into a modern as well as developed society and to protect our territory. From the history, the power of our country and government was weak, and then lagged behind. That was the main reason being invaded. The bloody and crude experience stimulates us to be strong. That period of history has impressed us deeply. However, the progress we have achieved currently, explains that we gained improvement and completed the development for humans’ life and living condition. Nevertheless, history should be focused on in the development of country; the reason is that people should learn adequate knowledge and information to culture a new nation appropriately to match nation’s style.

To conclude, what（可以省略） idea and knowledge from the past can help people in different ways. It offers some wise principles for both humans and their nations.

花姐这篇语法错误不少，看上去像是随手写的，两个理由难以支撑论点

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Being drunk might make you more accident in...--prone, but it also can increases your chance of survival.  Researchers published in the journal American surgen-surgeon reveals the tramoura patients are more likely to survive if they were in tacicakd-intoxicated at  if in the time they are-fo their injury.   A ritual suspected-retrospective study of nealy 8 thousands trama patients found that 70%--7%啊我听个70哇 of people who came in silver--sober die of their injuries. Well--while those who were hurt well--while drunk only died one percent of the time. A possitive--postive flat--blood alcoho level seems--ed to increase the likely--likeihood of survival even after the researchers taking--took in to the account to the Egypt--the age of patients and survival--the severity of the injury. trauma patients who went-came into the hospital drunk were distracted inner--discharged sooner, too . Exactly how alcohol protected--s the injuried is still not in clear. But the--a past study on animals did find out ..depeditor 's--that ethanol protected against nerve damage.  The new work in study--hints that of alcohol might have a place entreating--in treating traumatic injurise,...although more researchers is needed. In the meantime, avoiding trauma in the first place is still the stradegy one might call most silver--sober.

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prone 仰望的, 有倾向的
retropspected 回顾的, 追溯的
sober 清醒的,有节制的
ethanol 乙醇
traumatic 外伤的, 创伤的, 令人不快的