作文本1.21更新到今天！(低落)

lavenderelaineUID: 2689477

2.22 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves.

Nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply rising volume about whether most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves. In my perspective, I hold the view that most people often let others make decisions for them. My reasons are as following.

Initially, some people need other people to make decision for them such as children太突了放some people后吧. Children decisions usually are not made by themselves, but their parents. Since children do not have enough ability and knowledge, they cannot make any decisions by their own. Thus, their parents should decide some matters for children in order to let their children's life better(let their children live a better live.更好一些). For example, when I was a child, I love candies. I used to eat a host of candies before I went to the bed, but I did not know the fact that my actions damage my teeth’s' health(--' teeth in good condition). Luckily, my mother made a wise decision that she would not buy any candies for me. Now, I really thank my mother made those decisions for my health. So, children need their parents to make decision for them.

In addition, some people have to let others make decisions for them. Take the poor as an instance（能这样用么？~~ 不知。take the poor for instance,）. There are a large amount of poor people in my country. These people fight for their salary to feed themselves. These workers are so poor that their company can take advantage of money to ask them do some tasks which are not what they desire to do(应该是take advantages of them to do some tasks ,alluring by huge some of money)一般是take advantages 人、缺点. For instance, Richard, my brother, is a employee in a international trade company. Richard who is an excellent student in college really wants to get his master degree, but he has to work in there because his parents who have been ill for many years require Richchd's income to pay for medicine. Richard's father and mother cannot survive without his salary. So, Richard must follow his parent's will. My brother often tells me that he has made many times dreams about his master degree（he has been dreaming about his master degress）. However, in order to save his parents, he must work hard. If I did not know my brother experience, it was certain for me not to believe that some people have to let others make decisions for them. 主语变了。改成 If I do not know ..., I will certainly believe that...比较顺

In the nutshell, based on what I have written（不能吧……mentioned）, I deem that most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves due to their age and (,)the pressure and matters which they should confront with.

感觉2个例子好像都不是很能体现别人替自己作决定。 楼主可以再想想其他有没有更贴切的例子。  其他没什么大毛病

多谢帮我的修改~^^

刀小镜UID: 2618532

Nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply rising volume about whether most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves. In my perspective, I hold the view that most people often let others make decisions for them. My reasons are as following.

Initially, some people need other people to make decision for them such as children. Children’s decisions usually are not made by themselves, but (不用加by吗？)their parents. Since children do not have enough ability and knowledge, they cannot make any decisions by their own. Thus, their parent should decide some matters for children in order to let their children's life better. For example, when I was a child, I loved candies. I used to eat a host of candies before I went to the(去掉) bed, but I did not know the fact that my actions damage my teeth’s health. Luckily, my mother made a wise decision that she would not buy any candies for me. Now, I really thank my mother made those decisions for my health. So, children need their parents to make decision for them.


In addition, some people have to let others make decisions for them. Take the poor as an instance. There are a large amount of poor people in my country. These people fight for their salary to feed themselves. These workers are so poor that their company can take advantage of money to ask them do some tasks which are not what they desire to do.（这句同意帅帅姑娘的改法） For instance, Richard, my brother, is an employee in an international trade company. Richard who is an excellent student in college really wants to get his master degree, but he has to work in there because his parents who have been ill for many years require Richard's income to pay for medicine. Richard's father and mother cannot survive without his salary. So, Richard must follow his parent's will. My brother often tells me that he has made many times dreams about his master degree. However, in order to save his parents, he must work hard（因为前面说渴望学业
这里最好说“不得不放弃学业，努力工作赚钱”）. If I did not know my brother experience, it was certain for me not to believe that some people have to let others make decisions for them.


In the nutshell, based on what I have written, I deem that most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves due to their age and（换成逗号） the pressure and matters which they should（这种语境下最好用have to一类的）
confront with.


ETS的作文题目很多都很偏激 昨天看了那个美国外教改作文的帖子发现那个外教建议观点不要太过偏颇 因此我在怀疑究竟要不要采取中立的态度写作文呢？

lixinjiayouUID: 2754331

nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply rising volume about whether most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves. In my perspective, I hold the view that most people often let others make decisions for them. My reasons are as following. $ q6 M/ T% T) P9 p Initially, some people need other people to make decision for them such as children. （我觉得将such as children 提前会好一点，改成some people such as children need other people ……）Children decisions usually are not made by themselves, but their parents. Since children do not have enough ability and knowledge, they cannot make any decisions by their own（我觉得说any decisions 有点绝对了，毕竟有些决定是可以自己做的，改成they cannot make always make decisions especially important ones by their own ）. Thus, their parent should decide some matters for children in order to let their children's life better(let sth better？怎么感觉不这样用啊，to let the children live a better life). For example, when I was a child, I love candies. I used to eat a host of candies before I went to the bed, but I did not know the fact that my actions damage my teeth’s' health. Luckily, my mother made a wise decision that she would not buy any candies for me. Now, I really thank my mother made those decisions for my health. So, children need their parents to make decision for them.（说实话，我觉得的这个例子不太恰当，或者说完全不太恰当，咳咳。。。） / Q( q2 N" H8 `0 V In addition, some people have to let others make decisions for them. Take the poor as an instance. （应该是take the poor for instance）There are a large amount of poor people in my country. These people fight for their salary to feed themselves. These workers are so poor that their company can take advantage of money to ask them do some tasks which are not what they desire to do. For instance, Richard, my brother, is a(an) employee in a international trade company. Richard who is an excellent student in college really wants to get his master degree, but he has to work in there because his parents who have been ill for many years require(require感觉是要求的意思，改成need to use会不会好点儿) Richchd's income to pay for medicine. Richard's father and mother cannot survive without his salary. So, Richard must follow his parent's will. My brother often tells me that he has made many times dreams about his master degree. However, in order to save his parents, he must work hard. If I did not know my brother experience, it was certain for me not to believe that some people have to let others make decisions for them.（说实话我觉得这个例子还是不太恰当，这并不是别人帮他做决定，而是处境迫使一个人做出不同于自己意愿的决定）" In the nutshell, based on what I have written, I deem that most people often let others make decisions for them rather than make decisions by themselves due to their age and the pressure and matters which they should（改成may） confront with.

总的感觉就是例子应当更恰当点才好，呵呵，各人拙见

还有就是简单句过多，或许可以稍加提炼的精炼点^_^

bensonseuUID: 2707369

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about the statement that people can do few things well, for people are too busy doing many different things. Some people regard that the statement is correct. However, in my perspective, I disagree with the statement. My reasons are as following.
Initially, anyone's energy and time are limited. Only by staying focus（focusing or staying focused?） on one field can he do thing well. For example, it is normal phenomena in the university that student choose one mayor. According to a survey by Virginia University, some professors and experts report that only 5% students in the university have two mayors(majors). In other words, 95% students in Virginia University have one mayor. Why do these few students choose two mayors? If one student chooses two mayors, in other words, it is certain that he cannot handle too much studying pressure and deal with too many (much) homework and papers. Even though he can overcome these matters, it is impossible that he gets all A(s)
in every subjects (subject). Thus, he can do few subjects well, because he distracts his limited attention and time.* m4 ^9 Z  M4 n9 k
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In addition, as our society develops, our problems which we should confront with become more and more complicated. Although one people can (could) cope with many different things in the past, his ability and intelligence are insufficient for a huge task. Take my father as an instance. My father is an engineer. He often faces too many constructions which need many different people who have various skills and professional knowledge. Thus, those tasks are so difficult for my father that he organizes a team to figure out the task. Sometimes, they cannot provide a qualified constructional plan for the demands of their boss, because the task is too hard to do. I saw my father stay up one night to consider how to design a building. However, the fact is that my father team fails to do the plan well. (此句时态个人觉得需要修改) When I recall my father’s experience, I realize that people can do few things well because now our problems become difficult to work out.
In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, I hardly agree the statement that people can do few things well, for people are too busy doing many different things. I deem that since our problems become difficult to work out and our energy and time are limited, we can do few things well.
（您的用词很多地方都不错，然而有一些短语建议适当地可以变换一下形式，eg 文章中用的太多的too many 和too much，可以适当变换一下。
但是，全文最大的问题是您的写作思路完全紊乱啊！首先最开头您是不同意作者的观点的，那么我的理解是您是同意we can do things well even though we are busying with different things。 但是您的全文却还是在说we can do few things well，唯一的理解方式是您是否定的原题的because也就是we do few things well 的原因,而非是few？如果是这样的话…….(⊙o⊙)…那么阁下的理解方向果然是跟别人不一样了。。。
个人建议，仅供参考，如有不当之处，欢迎指正）

淡笑KathyUID: 2708253

Nowadays, there is a heated discussion with sharply soaring volume about the statement that people can do few things well, FOR前面不用逗号的吧for people are too busy doing many different things. Some people regard that the statement is correct. However, in my perspective, I disagree with the statement. My reasons are as following.

Initially, anyone's energy and time are limited. 呵呵 和我观点一致呦Only by staying focus on one field can he do thing well. For example, it is normal phenomena in the university that student choose one mayor. According to a survey by Virginia University, some professors and experts report that only 5% students in the university have two mayors. In other words, 95% students in Virginia University have one mayor.搬来了DATA，不错 有说服力 Why do these few students choose two mayors? If one student chooses two mayors, in other words,上上句刚出现过最好换个吧  it is certain that he cannot handle too much studying pressure and deal with too many homework and papers. Even though he can overcome these matters, it is impossible that he gets all A in every subjects. Thus, he can do few subjects well, because he distracts his limited attention and time.
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In addition, as our society develops, our problems which we should confront with become more and more complicated. Although one people can cope with many different things in the past, his ability and intelligence are insufficient for a huge task. Take my father as an instance. My father is an engineer. He often faces too many constructions which need many different people who have various skills and professional knowledge. Thus, those tasks are so difficult for my father that he organizes a team to figure out the task. Sometimes, they cannot provide a qualified constructional plan for the demands of their boss, because the task is too hard to do.这句感觉有点罗嗦重复了 I saw my father stay up one night to consider how to design a building.（好多TO吖，可以用用别的结构的说） However, the fact is that my father team fails to do the plan well. When I recall my father experience, I realize that people can do few things well because now our problems become difficult to work out.
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In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned above, I hardly agree the statement that people can do few things well, for people are too busy doing many different things. I deem that since our problems become difficult to work out and our energy and time are limited, we can do few things well.
鄙人之见， 一，可以让结构多样化，比如说从句啊，分词形式啊之类的。二，感觉LZ喜欢用IN ADDITION, BASED ON WHAT I HAVE MENTIONED ABOVE之类，不是说不好，只是用多了会给人生硬的感觉 。不过总体还是很不错的说~继续加油！*_*

奇流沙UID: 2698749

泪目，拍桌子，为毛格式全没了！怒！
2.24 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place

Nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply soaring volume about people living. Some people hold the view that people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. In my prospective, I hardly agree with their opinion. I deem that people should move to another place. My reasons are as following.

Initially, it is not practical for young people to live in the country, because young people need to hunt a job for feeding by themselves（这个用法不常见啊，改为to feed themselves如何）. If they continue to live in the country, it is hard tasks for them to hunt jobs, because these villages do not provide too many positions. So, young people who are living in the country should move to the city as soon as possible. Only in the city can young people find jobs which must be better than those in the country. Young people can easily obtain high salary and advantaged positions, which can let young people work hardly（？从句有点多余）. Thus, our economic will increase（经济增长用grow）which finally can lead our society to be better and better. So, young people should move into the city.

In addition, old people should move to the country. Since there are a large amount of exhausted smoke and wage which are released from industrial factories in the city, the health of old people who live in the city will be damaged. According to a survey by Virginia University, professors and experts report that 60% American old people who live in the city have many and various diseases. Thus, why do those old people come into the country? Those old people can breathe fresh air and enjoy the quite(quiet) environment. If old people move into the country, they will acquire safe lives, otherwise they still struggle with their sickness in the city(例子不错，但是结论太过牵强，乡村的空气又不能治病，搬到乡村就不用struggle with sickness了么？说成搬到乡村居住缓解病症要好些). Old people should move to the country in order to protect their health.

In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I regard that young people and old people should move to another place. Those are reasons why I cannot agree with the statement that people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place.
读完我觉得你的论点不错，同时对自己对于题目的理解产生了质疑。我自己想当然的认为题目的意思是：现代人应该医生居住在一个地方还是应该经常搬家。你对于题目的理解似乎是：人们是否应该住在城市或者乡村，生在哪里就待在那里。还想和同学探讨，这个题目怎么理解？

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

2.24 Do you agree or disagree: people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. u Nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply soaring volume about people living. Some people hold the view that people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. In my prospective, I hardly agree with their opinion. I deem that people should move to another place. My reasons are as following. Initially, it is not practical for young people to live in the country, because young people need to hunt a job for feeding by themselves. If they continue to live in the country, it is hard tasks(a hard task) for them to hunt jobs, because these villages do not provide too many positions. So, young people who are live in the country should move to the city as soon as possible. Only in the city can young people find jobs which must be better than those in the country. Young people can easily obtain high salary and advantaged positions, which can let young people work hardly. Thus, our economic will increase(搭配有点不对吧prosper如何?), which finally can lead our society to be better and better. So, young people should move into the city.  l" `# ^! \' ?% I+ W , H% A5 [4 O7 o- ^6 {, Z* I; G2 N; J* L In addition, old people should move to the country. Since there are a large amount of exhausted smoke and wage(啥意思？) which are released from industrial factories in the city, the health of old people who live in the city will be damaged. According to a survey by Virginia University, professors and experts report that 60% American old people who live in the city have many and various diseases. Thus, why do those old people come into the country? Those old people can breathe fresh air and enjoy the quite environment. If old people move into the country, they will acquire safe lives, (句号)otherwise they still struggle with their sickness in the city. Old people should move to the country in order to protect their health. In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I regard that young people and old people should move to another place. Those are reasons why I cannot agree with the statement that people should live in the city or country all life instead of moving to another place. 赞，我基本上看不出有什么问题，相当好啊。另外有一点稍微有点疑问？我感觉你理解moving to another place是这样的,你认为是从country到city或者从city到country是moving to another place对吧？但是可不可以理解成仅仅是换个地方生活就是我不强调是从乡村到城市或者从城市到乡村，仅仅是泛泛地说呢？

奇流沙UID: 2698749

2.25 Businessmen are only motivated by desire of money, agree or disagree?
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: }' U9 @, x+ y% V8 gNowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply soaring volume about businessmen. People want to ask: are businessmen only motivated by desire of money? In my prospective, my answer is negative. I deem that not only by desire of money are businessmen motivated, but also by social responsibility./ ~7 A6 l2 @! O  h7 O. I) d8 r/ N
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Initially, earning more and more money indeed is a businessmen’s main goal, because businessman also is a kind of job which is the same as other professional workers. When workers finish their products, they will get the salary. Likewise, when businessmen complete their deals, they will get the profits.（不错，不能一句话表达，就分成两句平行的，嗯，不错~） Anyone desires to make more money including Jintao Hu who is the richest people in China（呃，这个，尽管Mr.Hu是国家最高领导人，但是个人觉得他还真不是中国最富有的……而且他也属于公务员吧，都是领工资的怎么着都没有商人赚得多啊，就算却是他那啥，也不会放台面上说的……强烈建议别扯到有关政治上……）. If businessmen are not motivated by desire of money, why should we pay for their products or deals when we buy those goods? So, it is very obvious that desire of money is one of reasons why businessmen are indulged in making business.
论点不错，但是例子实在不能举那一个……
In addition, desire of money is not the only target for businessmen to pursue their success. For example, Richard who was my professor founded a supermarket last year. Until now, his supermarket has been operated very well. Every day, thousands of citizens come to his supermarket to purchase various goods. My neighbors often tell me that vegetables which are bought from Richard's supermarket are good-quality and fresh. All people who lived in my town regard that Richard is an honest and fair businessman. When I asked Richard the reasons why he gave up the professor position which has have a high salary and turn to open his own supermarket, Richard argued that all persons should do their duty to their society.（argue用的很奇怪……这句总结很突兀啊……不做教授开超市就是对社会尽义务这个说法有点牵强啊……） Even though Richard used to be an excellent and intelligent professor, he feel his responsibility is to bring more benefits to all people in my town. If I do not know Richard story, I will never realize that social responsibility plays a crucial role in motivating businessmen to do their job.
例子不错但是说法有点牵强。建议再说明为什么教授觉得做教授不能尽义务，或者说，做教授做的没有开超市让大家获得的实惠更实在。

In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that desire of money as well as social responsibility is vital factors to encourage businessmen to work. That is the reason why I hardly agree with the statement that businessmen are only motivated by desire of money.
结构不错，论点也不错，就是例子需要精修的说~加油~

Uranus1989UID: 2756616

2.25 Businessmen are only motivated by desire of money, agree or disagree?

Nowadays, there is a heated topic with sharply soaring volume about businessmen.(......又来了，呵呵，好吧，谁让这是你的模板呢) People want to ask: are businessmen only motivated by desire of money? In my prospective, my answer is negative. I deem that not only by desire of money are businessmen motivated, but also by social responsibility.  B; C, t8 v1 |; D* l
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Initially, earning more and more money indeed is a businessmen’s main goal, because businessman also is(is also) a kind of job which is the same as other professional workers(job 不能the same as其他的prefessional workers,换成occupation如何?). When workers finish their products, they will get the salary. Likewise, when businessmen complete their deals, they will get the profits. Anyone desires to make more money including Jintao Hu(哈哈哈...) who is the richest people in China. If businessmen are not motivated by desire of money, why should we pay for their products or deals when we buy those goods? So, it is very obvious that desire of money is one of reasons why businessmen are indulged in making business. + t4 S# b* N3 h9 ~1 `. i* Q

In addition, desire of money is not the only target for businessmen to pursue their success. For example, Richard who was my professor(my professor, Richard) founded a supermarket last year. Until now, his supermarket has been operated very well. Every day, thousands of citizens come to his supermarket to purchase various goods. My neighbors often tell me that vegetables which are(去掉) bought from Richard's supermarket are good-quality and fresh. All people who lived in my town regard that Richard is an honest and fair businessman. When I asked Richard the reasons why he gave up the professor position which has have a high salary turn to open his own supermarket, Richard argued that all person should do their duty to their society. Even though Richard used to be a excellent and intelligent professor, he feel his responsibility is to bring more benefits to all people in my town. If I do not know Richard's story, I will never realize that social responsibility plays a crucial role in motivating businessmen to do their job.8 U1 X  b6 g& X
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In the nutshell, based on what I have mentioned, I believe that desire of money as well as social responsibility is vital factors to encourage businessmen to work. That is the reason why I hardly agree with the statement that businessmen are only motivated by desire of money.
先赞一下，另外你Hu JinTao那句是在开玩笑吧，哈哈哈。然后in addition那段我觉得那个例子太长了吧，而且里面有些信息感觉和文章关联也不是很大，比如你主要想说这人他造福社会，可是你的例子在强调他的生意做的好，所以感觉有点不顺，你说呢

luofayiUID: 2325524

Nowadays, as our society develops（development）, there is heat topic with sharply soaring volume about education. Does playing sports teach us the important lesson of life? Some people regard that students' task is merely study. However, in my perspective, I agree with the statement playing sports can teach us the important lesson of life. My reasons are as following.  n* C; f4 l$ u- Q( i
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Initially, attending sports can teach us the corporation spirit. Since some sports such as basketball, football, and baseball need team works, we must take advantage of passing and the corporation spirit in order to win games. So, in the process of passing and encouraging each other, we can exert the corporation spirit. The reason why do（貌似去掉do） we learn the corporation spirit is that the corporation spirit plays a crucial role in our future life. With our knowledge and technology increasing, more and more projects are completed by teams rather than one people. Thus, we cannot hunt a job or obtain success without teammates supports, in other words, corporation（cooperation） with other people will be a part of our life.
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In addition, playing sports can bring us health. Health is a vital basement for everyone. If we do not acquire health, what will be left must be sickness. Once we are ill, there is no doubt that we cannot improve life quality any more. Participating sport will bring us health, because we can take more fresh air and fortify our muscle, which will lead our body to be stronger. Nobody can deny health is not an important part in our life.论点好，但说明有点不到位
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What is more? Sports like hiking, swimming and running can help us learn the importance of effort. For example, many athletes are famous people due to not only their metal but also their effort which should be appreciated by anyone. Even though these athletes did not win a goal, they have trained for thousands of times for that objective. The importance of effort which is illustrated by training again and again is spirit which everyone should learn. If we did not realize importance of effort, we will fail to death.

In sum, based on what I have mentioned, I deem that playing sports is so important lesson of life that it brings the corporation （cooperation）spirit, health and the importance of effort.
论点好，连接好，但论述不够完美。