作文本1.21更新到今天！(低落)

刀小镜UID: 2618532

Nowadays, as our societydevelops,（along with oursociety development） our paradox betweenpreservation of environment and economic development has become a heated publictopic, with sharply risen volume. Which should governments focus on betweenpreservation of environment and economic development（between后面的都去掉吧否则和前面重复了）? I deem that governments should equally focus onboth of them. Here are my reasons as follow.6 {, ]( V  G& N

Initially, economic development has been a crucial task of（for）governments since human society formed(appeared, form感觉有些汉化). Ifone government does not focus on(用个别的形式把focus on替换掉吧) economic development(最好换一个次 advanced), ourwage must be（划掉） decrease, our children must be hungryand our society must be chaos, causing entire country even （the）whole nation will collapse.(这段还是汉化了) So our government should pay attentions and fund on economicdevelopment. In the（this） waywe can get (a)better life. For example, China government has begun theireconomic reform to enhance Chinese powers since 1978. Now, the fact that Chineseare richer and Chinese corporations become stronger than those in the past（，which）impresses all people who has been China in the world. My father who（划掉）
went （back）to Chinalast year (and)told me: if I have not been china, I cannot image how importantthat governments should focus on economic development is. % r+ E$ z1 T5 N7 `

In addition, preservation of environment is alsobasic job for governments. If we live in the environment which is full ofsewages and dirty, our healthy(health) must bedamaged. This is the reason why more and more people concerned preservation ofenvironment. For example, Richard who was my best friend lived (in)a harmony community. Two years ago, two factorieswere established near his community. Now the air which used to be fresh ispolluted by the toxics which are released by those factories. Richard also wassick due to air pollution. When I got the news that he was dead, I reallyregard that government should focus on preservation of environment. Indeed, ourenvironment is easy to be destroyed. According to a survey of VirginiaUniversity, 50% frosts has been(划掉) become deserts inthe world. Thus, our life space will be less and less, finally threading humansurviving. So, without preservation of environment, we and our governments willdisappear.

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In sum, considering what I have mentioned above, I hardly agree with thestatement that governments should focus more on preservation of environmentrather than economic development.(姑娘这句有点突兀啊)Since preservation of environment is the same important as economicdevelopment, I deem government should equally focus on both of them.
姑娘有好多句子汉化现象挺明显的（喂，你自己也有这样的毛病好吧==!）如果时间还充裕背背200句什么的 下一个可以查近义词的词霸或者找别人总结好的单词替换表 多用几种表达方式避免重复

祝姑娘新年快乐 考T成功 出国顺利^^

刀小镜UID: 2618532

感谢姑娘给我指出的问题 语法一直是我的软肋 谢谢姑娘的意见 合掌
那个advanced 和development是同一个意思
waste也可作形容词
Some experts point out that environment problems is the matter of life and death—a matter no country can afford to ignore.（没有一个国家可以承担忽视环境问题的责任。）
这一句是200句里的原句 我觉得挺洋气的就用了 囧rz

yuminjiaUID: 2659628

2.14 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The purpose of television should be all educative, not entertain

Nowadays, as our society develops, Televisions are is the best invention for us to transmit information in the progress that our technology and knowledge are increasing .(啥叫科技和知识正在增长?不合逻辑啊;水平有限我也想不出来什么词替换increasing) But the purpose of television is a heated topic with sharply risen volume. Some people hold that the purpose of television should be all educative, while some people argue that televisions should be put in entertainment. In my prospective, both of them have their own reasons. I deem that the purposes of television should be educative and recreational. Here are my reasons.

Initially, TV is a major media for entertainment. We often can see cartoon, TV show, and news report on TV. These programs bring us a host of information and happiness. Once we have free time to open watch TV, we can enjoy these programs. For example, my family usually watches TV together at night. When we are watching TV, we not only get pleasure brought by TV but also talk the subjects showed on tv. I really appreciate the time when our family watching TV together. But, TV sometimes should give us some educative programs. Since some channels always play cartoon, children will not tend to go to study. That is why the reasons why that some people insist that the purpose of television should be all educative.

With the development of internet, our patterns of study are changing. We cannot only choose go to the university to attend a presentation lecture but also take advantage of internet or TV to participant online courses. So, now educative programs are playing a more and more crucial role in our study life. For example, after Alice, my sister, failed to hunt a job, she decided to go to university. However, she could not afford the expensive tuition. Considering these difficulty, she decided to study at home by herself. At the beginning, she could not focus on her study and also were confusing what she should learn. When she watched a program about cooking, she believed herself would be a excellent cooker. And then she bought lots of online courses of cooking(这里是不是改成说:她从电视上学做菜比较点题). Until last year she had found a job in a restaurant. Every times when my sister told me her experience, I had never realized how meaning that (从语法上我不太能读明白这个句子) the purpose of television should be all educative is.

In sum, since what I mentioned above, I really assert that the purposes of television should be educative and recreational.

我没有写过这种中立的文章,但是从文章的题目来看我觉得应该强调的是电视的娱乐功能不可以少;所以我觉得应该少写教育功能(因为这个本来就是题目所承认的)比如第3段;

语法上要注意单复数主谓的问题;有个别句子有点小罗嗦

刀小镜UID: 2618532

Nowadays, as our society develops, Televisions are the best invention for us to transmit information in the progress that our technology and knowledge are increasing. But the purpose of television is a heated topic with sharply risen volume. Some people hold that the purpose of television should be all educative while some people argue that televisions should be put in entertainment. In my prospective, both of them have their own reasons. I deem that the purposes of television should be educative and recreational. Here are my reasons.

Initially, TV is a mayor media for entertainment. We often can see cartoon, TV show, and news report on TV. These programs bring us a host of information and happiness. Once we have free time to open TV, we can enjoy these programs. For example, my family usually watches TV together at night. When we are watching TV, we not only get pleasure brought by TV but also talk the subjects showed on tv. I really appreciate the time when our family watching（watch）TV together. But, TV sometimes should give us some educative programs. Since some channels always play cartoon, children will not tend to go to study. That is why (划掉) the reasons（reason）why some people insist that the purpose of television should be all educative.

With the development of internet (Internet), our patterns of study are changing. We cannot only choose to go to the university to attend a presentation but also take advantage of internet or TV to participant online courses. So, now educative programs are playing a more and more crucial role in our study life. For example, after Alice, my sister, failed to hunt a job, she decided to go to university. However, she could not afford the expensive tuition. Considering these difficult (difficulty), she decided to study at home by herself. At the beginning, she could not focus on her study and also were confusing(为什么要用过去进行时呢 confused相对好些吧) what she should learn. When she watched a program about cooking, she believes（believed）herself would be a(an) excellent cooker(cooker是炊具= =! Cook就是厨师的意思). And then she bought lots of online courses of cooking. Until last year she had found a job in a restaurant. Every times（time 没有搜到every times的用法不知道是不是姑娘笔误） when my sister told me her experience, I had never realized how meaning that the purpose of television should be all educative is.（如果用never 前面不应该用until一类的吗）

In sum, since what I mentioned above, I really assert that the purposes of television should be educative and recreational.最后一段最好再写几句
否则感觉结尾好仓促

amanda_qinyyUID: 2632170

2.15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.+ n5 L/ u' _8 A+ J2 A  o
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When we talk about visiting a country which is unfamiliar to us, most of(of不要) people will recommend that visiting museums is the（an） important step to learn about a country. In my perspectives, there are many other means to realize a country except visiting museums. That is the reason why I cannot(don’t好些，一般是can’t agree more表同意) agree with the statement that visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.这个开头不错

Initially, it is admitted by all of us that museums indeed are perfect places for tourists to learn about the country's culture and history. We(加上can) not only see various artwares（artworks?art wares?） of the country made in different eras and(but) also study the country history. For example, I went to China last year. I visited the museum in Shanghai. I did see many paintings, potters, and wagons which were what I never had seen before. The experience really helps me to realize China and Chinese in some extent. 8 Q7 k% c2 i' G( H

But, I cannot deny that although the museum showed（shows） a host of artwares(同上), those（they） are abstract(加上to…再写点). When we visit the country, most of us have limited time in the country, but which take us lots of time and fund to come to the country.（有点不通顺） So, if we merely visit museum, it is not necessary to come to the country.（这里说的太绝对了） Considering those factors, we would rather read books or visit the country's official website to get the knowledge of the country.  Since these ways are free or cost less than visiting museums, visiting museums is not the best way to learn about a country.（有重复，since和although的用法一样吗？） When we spent a large amount of time and money to come to the country, we also do not(wish to) stay at the museum(for all day long), because outside of the museum（应该说某种方式吧because touching with the outside world of the museum这样好不？）is a more direct way to understand the country than inside of the museum（不要或者改成动作 looking around in the museum）. Like my travel in China, I really like Chinese shops, people and food. I can buy what I want to buy in Chinese shop. First and foremost, whatever is sold in shops, they are cheap and practical. What is more, Chinese are very kind. Whenever I encounter troubles such as missing in road, it is normal for me to be helped by Chinese. And Chinese food also are excellent, I cannot image how many various kinds of food I had eaten. Take snack as a instance, there are dumplings, muddles, spring rolls and so on. If we desire to learn about a country, we can try to other means in that country. Museums are a part of them.我觉得这个例子不错，但是要再强调一下你通过这个travel更加深了某方面—从museum里所不能获得的对country的了解。

In sum, from what I had mentioned, I regard that visiting museums is a way to learn about a country rather than the best way to learn about a country. So I disagree with the statement that visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country

很喜欢你的这个开头，我是酝酿了好久也没写出开头，向你学习！
第三段明显很长很长，能不能在内容上稍微调整下，让论述部分的段落均衡一点。
结尾还可以再阐释下，感觉收尾不是太好。

slimhUID: 2438517

2.15 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country.1 k $ ~+ ]! }- Y3 S, f2 F: }: } . h0 V# A+ Y# d When we talk about visiting a country which is unfamiliar to us, most of (the) people will recommend that visiting museums is the important step to learn about a country. In my perspectives, there are many other means to realize a country except visiting museums. That is the reason why I cannot(do not) agree with the statement that visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country. Initially, it is admitted by all of us that museums indeed are perfect places for tourists to learn about the country's culture and history. We not only see various artwares of the country made in different eras and(but) also study the country's history. For example, I went to China last year. I visited the museum in Shanghai. I did see many paintings, potters, and wagons which were what I never had seen before. The experience really helps me to realize China and Chinese in some extent. But, I cannot deny that although the museum showed a host of artwares, those are abstract. When we visit the country, most of us have limited time in the country, but which take us lots of time and fund to come to the country. So, if we merely visit museum, it is not necessary to come to the country. Considering those factors, we would rather read books or visit the country's official website to get the knowledge of the country.  Since these ways are free or cost less than visiting museums, visiting museums(重复了） is not the best way to learn about a country. When we spent a large amount of time and money to come to the country, we also（不明白also在这里的意思) do not stay at the museum, because outside of the museum is more direct way to understand the country than inside of the museum. Like my travel in China, I really like Chinese shops, people and food. I can buy what I want to buy in Chinese shop. First and foremost, whatever is sold in shops, they are cheap and practical. What is more, Chinese are very kind. Whenever I encounter troubles such as missing in road（迷路？）, it is normal for me to be helped by Chinese. And Chinese food also are excellent, I cannot image how many various kinds of food I had eaten. Take snack as a instance, there are dumplings, muddles, spring rolls and so on. If we desire to learn about a country, we can try to other means in that country. Museums are a part of them. In sum, from what I had mentioned, I regard that visiting museums is a way to learn about a country rather than the best way to learn about a country. So I disagree with the statement that visiting museums is the best way to learn about a country 总结： 第三段举例比较详细，很不错。整个作文比较流畅。继续努力吧

slimhUID: 2438517

补充一下，我们现在写的这些题目都是以前出过的吗？我总觉得出题怪怪的。。

刀小镜UID: 2618532

Nowadays, as our society develops, our employee problem has been a heated topic with sharply risen volume. Some people like a job with more vacation time while some people prefer a job with high salary but less vacation time. In my perspective, my job should be with medium salary and suitable vacation time. Based on my opinion, I disagree with the statement that a job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

Initially, the reason why people should to work is that people desire to acquire enough money to afford the cost of his own life. So salary plays a crucial role in our career. For example, most of college students hope themselves to hunt a job with high salary in cities. According to a survey of Virginia University, some professors and experts report that 80% college students in American want to get more wages in their positions. This case illustrates that more and more people deem that it is necessary to get a job with high salary. We survive hardly with a job with low salary, so our wage should equal to the expenditure of our daily life.

Once we get a job with high salary, we should take more time to travel. Why don’t we stop to pursue higher salary? Actually, working(work 可以做名词也可做动词) is a part of our life. The purpose of working is to get enough money to enjoy our life or let our life become more and more harmony. When we have a job with high salary which not only affords the cost of our daily life but also has extra money（这句好像不对吧 When we have a job with high salary, which could not only make us can afford the cost of our daily life but also let us have extra money. 改成这样不知道对不对 因为工作不可能 has extra money 语法废柴一枚如果改错了姑娘见谅）, we should decrease our working(work) time then increase our vacation time. We take advantage of our vacation time to accompany our family numbers, improve our health by exercise and release our working pressure by hiking and so on. Except these goals, the foremost purpose is to recover our energy and release our working pressure（前面有提到release our working pressure 后面又说except……the foremost purpose...release our working pressure有些矛盾了）, causing us more efficiently work and then take more money. So, vacation time also is very important for us who has had a job with high salary.

In sum, only by the balance of working and vacation we can have a pleasant life. So I regard that we should hunt a job with medium salary and suitable vacation time.




我觉得中立观点应该没问题吧（挠头） ETS不会死板到只能认准一个观点吧 毕竟好多观点都太极端了……

小心littleheartUID: 2726034

2.16 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.
Nowadays, as our society develops, our employees’ problem has been a heated topic with sharply risen volume. Some people like a job with more vacation time while some people prefer a job with high salary but less vacation time. In my perspective, my job should be medium salary and suitable vacation time. Based on my opinion, I disagree with the statement that A (a) job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.观点明确，很好~

Initially, the reason why people should to work is that people desire to acquire（gain） enough money to afford the cost of his own life. So salary plays a crucial role in our career. For example, most of college students hope themselves to hunt a job with high salary in cities. According to a survey of Virginia University, some professors and experts report that 80% college students in American want to get more wages in their positions. This case illustrates that more and more people deem that it is necessary to get a job with high salary. We （最好加个can）survive hardly with a job with low salary, so our wage should equal to (用得好~学习了~) the expenditure of our daily life.
Once we get a job with high salary, we should take more time to travel. Why do we stop to pursue higher salary? Actually, working is a part of our life. The purpose of working is to get enough money to enjoy our life or let our life become more and more harmony. When we have a job with high salary which not only affords the cost of our daily life but also has extra money, we should decrease our working time then increase our vacation time. We take advantage of our vacation time to accompany our family numbers, improve our health by exercise and release our working pressure by hiking and so on. Except these goals, the foremost purpose is to recover our energy and release our working pressure, causing us more efficiently work（可以这样用？） and then take more money.(这句话前半句的意思和上句重复，如果是我会这么写，Only by this mean, could we improve the efficiency of work and earn more money.) So, vacation time also is very important for us who has had a job with high salary.

In sum, only by the balance of working and vacation we can have a pleasant life.(这句话楼主是不是在用only引导的状语从句？如果是，主句应该倒装) So I regard that we should hunt a job with medium salary and suitable vacation time.
对于这种偏激题目，楼主持中立态度是不错的选择，第二段主要说我们要得到一个不错的salary，第三段说得到不错salary的同时还要注意vacation.最后总结权衡~结构很清晰~~

tomatooUID: 2754865

Nowadays, as our society develops(你爱上这句话了，呵呵), our knowledge and technology are increasing. There is the fact which no one can deny that technology have（has） deep effect in(固定搭配have effect on) our daily life. But we cannot agree with each other on the issue whether technology makes people’s lives simpler. I deem the answer to that issue is positive. Here are my reasons as follow.

Initially, since our knowledge and technology become more and more advanced, more and more inventions have appeared. For example, in 18th century, after they(who are they?) married, there are too many women as domestic engineers. They(their) responsibility is complicated housework such as washing, cooking, and cleaning. However, when washers, microwaves, these machines had been invented, housewives has been released from housework nowadays, causing(导致了？用because, or, resulting from) they can take advantage of those machines to finish their tasks completely. If one house wife desired to cook a great meal in the past, it may be took one day time to prepare materials, whereas now she just need half of hour to cope with the matter, even can make a call to book dishes in restaurant. So, we can view our family’s life indeed become simper（这样的例子的确又简单想，又简单写，还简单懂，重要的是还很有说服力！好！）.% e3（） c  ?4 w$ Y

Actually, not only our family’s life, but also our working has been simple. According to a survey from Virginia University, professors and experts report that 45% American managers use their phones, computers, and internet to deal with their business problems at their home. These people are not working at office any more, in other words, they do not need(need not) to take cars, buses, and subways to commute between home and office every day. Thus, it saves time and money, which(这个which用得不好) makes our working become simple. Except（except不包括在内,besides才算在内） managers, workers also acquire benefits from technology development. Take my father as an instance. My father is a plane designer. I still remember that my father needs a host of paper and tools to draw plane construction and required a large amount of time and energy to consider for one night in the past. Even my mother told me when my father slept, he also said much words about (the) plane. Since my father's company equipped my father with a laptop, our father's working life has been easy. He utilizes computer programs to design his plane rather than use paper and tools. Foremost, my father told me it is no necessary to consider problems in his mind, because he can figure out them in programs. From my father's experience, I totally understand that how easy and simple life technology brings.) ^' Y# S) s: n2 V1 v( R: Y* e

In sum, based on what I have mentioned, I deem that technology makes people’s lives simple and easy. That is the reason why I hardly agree with the statement that technology makes people’s lives simpler in turn to make people’s lives more complicated.(这句话多余！)

24分钟写完，真不错，还有时间可以检查，呵呵！
就我而言，文章稍欠深度。
However, I am not the rater. So forget it.
For TOEFL, this is really a wonderful article!
GOOD JOB!