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本帖最后由 ivybetty 于 2010-1-27 20:50 编辑
Nowadays, There is a debate about that people spend more time on personal enjoyment rather than what they should do. Some people who like entertainment think people should spend more time on personal enjoyment while some people who like working or studying hold that people should spend more time on what they should do. I deem both of them have sufficient reasons.(看来楼主的观点是两种都有理了,那是否要明确表示下不同意题目观点以示扣题?) 4 H# c. `" J/ u* e6 @& C
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In first place, personal enjoyment is necessary to everybody's life. For example, every person need eight hours one day sleep(这个有过于绝对之嫌,是否可以该成to keep healthy and refresh for job next day.) to recover our energy and stamina. If anyone do not sleep for eight hours one day, it is certain that he will get sick.(和上句一样很绝对) How does he do what he should do when he is ill? So, personal enjoyment exerts an important function for himself job. For another instance, everybody always has his own hobbies such as playing basketball, cheese(chess?), video game and so on. Then, when we are under pressure and matters which come from our job, why do we try to use my(our) hobbies to release our depressed mood and our nervous brain? I heard a Japanese company gave its employees' office to install video game in order to they(in order to keep them) work happily.8 E: K/ M) t% P$ W& G, T* j
In addition, what we should do also is important. On one hand, As long as we do what we should do, we will get what we want including our personal enjoyment. Like me, I really want to get a new computer, so I must work harder to get(make) more money which is paid for my new computer. On the other hand, If we always pursue our personal enjoyment rather than do not do what we should do, we will be punished. When I was a student, I take the time which I should take to finish my homework to play video game. Then, I was ordered to stand in(去掉) outside of classroom for couple hours after my teacher checked my homework.
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In sum, I argue that we should schedule our time for personal enjoyment and what we should do. We need to balance their time to get our career success.结尾简洁明朗,学习了!但是前面的两段例举中如果提到相关结论,可能不会使读者觉得唐突. |
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