【回报GTER】joyce的作文修改铺【13号打烊】

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43# 美丽太阳花
你若有空，可以把你参考的提纲发给我看看么？

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44# ppjoyce  
嗯，对于很多人来说，是思路模板化了，确实也是个人水平有限
还有不到半个月的时间就考试了，我搬了很多别人的提纲
可是除了这个，我不知道该怎么办，迷茫
我也不打算写太多篇作文了，写了感觉思 ...
美丽太阳花 发表于 2010-8-4 18:08

我刚才是说我的水平有限~~==如果给你造成了误解....

半个月的时间还是很长的，要好好利用，
至于提纲我自己觉得，没必要写太多
我自己一直排斥题海战术
觉得只要是方法掌握了 到了考场 没见过的题照样能够写出来不错的

我建议可以多看看句型，句式的，平时背背
自己分析分析好的文章，比如官方范文
慢慢就会有感觉了

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47# ppjoyce
本来想附件传上来，可是发现格式太大了，回复受限制
我给你个链接吧，最早是在太傻上流行的，不过我现在找不到原帖了，给你个别的链接
http://wenku.baidu.com/view/3d3df818964bcf84b9d57b75.html
不考G不舒服斯基系列。

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https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1131374-1-1.html

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谢谢楼主@@

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47# ppjoyce
嗯，现在就打算这么做了
提纲我自己都很厌恶总是照搬别人的
我想多总结点儿好的表达，好好研究北美范文，最后大概把高频完整地写一遍
别的怎么样，就看造化了

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找到了找到了
太傻链接http://bbs.taisha.org/thread-1336425-1-6.html

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47# ppjoyce  
本来想附件传上来，可是发现格式太大了，回复受限制
我给你个链接吧，最早是在太傻上流行的，不过我现在找不到原帖了，给你个别的链接
http://wenku.baidu.com/view/3d3df818964bcf84b9d57b75.htm ...
美丽太阳花 发表于 2010-8-4 18:24

好的 我来研究下：）

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51# 美丽太阳花
Bless：）

要相信自己能行的

：）

Good Luck

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49# 1bueh17
OK

待会会用附件形式上传

注意关注下回复：）

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52# 美丽太阳花
我点到太傻了
发现下不了

很多人也都在反应无法下载 ...

我待会自己也找找

是我帮忙改作文遇到的第一个挑战

恩恩 非弄清楚不可~~

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49# 1bueh17
改好了：）

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Hi,这是今天刚写的I7，郁闷死我了，为什么刚开始写的还顺的，到后面就不知道写啥了呢，一个小时楞是写成了两个小时，我的I啊～
TOPIC: ISSUE7 - "The video camera provides such an accurate and convincing record of contemporary life that it has become a more important form of documentation than written records."
WORDS: 592          TIME: 02:00:00          DATE: 2010-8-4 18:05:46
 
From ordinary written records to contemporary electronic records, the diversification brings individuals from silence, colorless, and no moving to observing vivid colorful phenomenons directly. The modern records is convenient and functional for accounting happy moment and significant time to recalling our nice memory in the future, however, is it possible that the video camera replaces the ordinary written records?
 
It does not deny that the video camera could provide us more accurate and veracious record for our common life than pen. When we have a tourist, most of us would take video camera to record the every little things in the journey, the gigantic waterfall, gorgeous sunshine, charming back shadow and so forth, while we strain our every nerve to imagine what the scenery like, the video has already presented this beauteous scene by a series of actual picture. This the video camera, always provides us more impact and intuitive impression.
 
It is a great innovation, when the video camera adopt in law and judgment. In the past, detectives made use of pencil and paper to copy and reproduce a series of trace in crime scene, and at the same time adding a long section of words to depicting the concrete phenomenon.  Nevertheless, as the evidences by written records easily to demolish, and for the same case, the different comprehension to the words, there is a host of troubles in cracking and judgment. At same time, it is easy for video camera to catching details and traces. The camera return to original condition to the detectives and magistrates objectively. Thereby, it is highly ruling out the unjust and wrong case. So to speak, the video camera offers more expedience to our contemporary life.
 
Even video camera is so significant to our life, written records have obvious advantages in authority and conciseness. As I illustrate above, the video camera plays a important role in recording and collecting evidences, however, all the legal regulations are written records, and the judgments are also recorded by pencil and paper. Comparing the details and process records by video camera, the written records are more authoritative and ceremonious. The video camera could not cover this character of written records. Meanwhile, history could be recorded more concise and accurate by pencil and paper. It is frequently covering a long period for recording history, with written records, it might be a paper words for the Renaissance, and yet maybe a tremendous work to video camera. Written records are more summative for a long period.
 
In addition, written records could hit and reflect the inner mind, the video camera always show the appearance. That is to say, words have emotion. It is the most important difference between written records and electronic records. Just thinking how the tool used to express heart could be covered for the video camera for showing the appearance. It could be experienced the different emotion for the same words to disparate readers, video camera might limit us in the same pictures by accurate recording. There are thousand Hamlets in a thousand people’s eyes, it is the part of written records charm.

Within the development of the society, high tech products clog the life and confuse our minds. We import the words by computer not pencil, we read books on the internet rather than paper books, we sent emails instead of writing letters, sometimes, this might be considered as the development the society, however, it also means the backwards of capacity and culture. The real development of civilization could involves the technical implementation and conservation of the culture.

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58# janneth
明天帮你改吧 今天有点累了

明天一早起来就改

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31# yinghui12
不用客气，：）

你果真跑题了，或者说是没说道点子上

恩恩  建议你再写一遍，看看其他人的范文，再拿来讨论：）
ppjoyce 发表于 2010-8-4 08:59

楼主，不好意思，晚上刚上完自习回来。急忙就上来看了，先感谢下楼主。我自己再看一下。