skysijie作业本

SkysijieUID: 2233317

第一次作业：
issue 41:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-601651-1-1.html
issue130:  https://bbs.gter.net/thread-601211-1-1.html
issue50:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-601631-1-1.html
argue147https://bbs.gter.net/thread-605113-1-1.html

第二次作业：
issue51:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-603374-1-1.html
issue47:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-604136-1-1.html
issue144 :https://bbs.gter.net/thread-604735-1-1.html
argue17:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-605096-1-1.html

第三次作业：
issue38:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-605592-1-1.html
issue103:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-606123-1-1.html
issue147:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-606273-1-1.html
argue51：https://bbs.gter.net/thread-606723-1-1.html

第四次作业：
issue185:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-608624-1-1.html
issue17:
issue83:
argue2:
用了几天才憋出一篇，剩下的会尽快补上，同志们实在对不住阿！


第五次作业：
issue36:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-610550-1-1.html

自由写作：
issue70:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-611975-1-1.html
issue11:https://bbs.gter.net/thread-614127-1-1.html
issue43:https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=617964&extra=page%3D1
argument148:https://bbs.gter.net/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=617970&extra=page%3D1

[ 本帖最后由 Skysijie 于 2007-2-28 22:17 编辑 ]

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Socialization is the process by which human beings learn to adopt the behavior patterns of the community in which they live. Which kind of socialization determines which kind of children.（觉得这句话表达的不是很清楚：）） Unfortunately, we don’t have a perfect method to raise our children to be the one who contributes to bring about a better society.

The benefit of a good socialization demonstrates in a child’s whole life time obviously, whether to society or to himself. A celebrated person can illustrate the thesis abundantly. He left off his study in the second yeas in the university. He made up a digital empire named Microsoft. He is creating numerous fortunes to society.（其实这几个小句子能串成一个长句要好的） From his childhood, Bill Gates participate a lot of parties, celebrate meetings, in where he learns how to communicate with different kinds of people, draw different clothes judging by the attribute of the meeting, adopt the behavior patterns of the society. Many people, including myself, don’t think it is a miracle that he created Microsoft world, which bring society into a new digital times, after drop his study. There is no doubt to say that a well socialized child can change society in a good way. 感觉例子的分量太大了，就显得分析论证太少。

On the other hand, the disadvantage, a child doesn’t have a good socialization, showed clearly as well. Robinson Crusoe, who live with himself in a isolated island for twenty-eight years long, cannot live with other people, even cannot speaking ,when he returned to society. Similarly, a child, who have insufficient socialization or even have no contact with community, have no capability to adopt the behavior patterns of community, don’t need to say to determine the destiny of community in which he lives.

We do have our children merge into the society, though, we don’t think highly of socialization. Firstly, one thing we have aware is that too many parents are compelling their children to learn variety skills, including dancing, singing, painting and calligraphy, when they are young. Besides, children have to attempt course about mathematics, chemistry, physics, or even foreign language. Secondly, community supports chance to gather children together, occasionally, to play or to talk to each other（没太明白什么意思：））. Thirdly, regardless, teenagers have such a good chance in the school, their leisure time has reduced by endless homework, longer and longer course’ time, more and more strict discipline. In a word, our society is declining provide the opportunity to have children socialized.

To sum up, the responsibility of society to teach children adopt the behavior patterns of community is ignored by many people. Besides, the importance of how to raise children to be a contribution one, which decide the future and the destiny of society, should be recognized.
文章的结构，思路都很清晰。例子举得也很恰当，看来下了不少功夫
有些小的语法错误可以尽量去避免
这篇思路和展开都要比issue41要好，有进步，加油！

SkysijieUID: 2233317

语法是我最头疼的问题.
这几天好好改改再放上来:)