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本帖最后由 ieyangj08 于 2010-1-8 14:32 编辑
范文与点评
6分答卷 *所有答卷均按原文引用,包括错误、拼写等
In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement, both positive and negative effects among persons in Western society call for a balance in which there are both specialists and generalists.
Specialists are necessary in order to allow society as a whole to properly and usefully assimilate the masses of new information and knowledge that have come out of research and have been widely disseminated through mass global media. As the head of Pharmacology at my university once said (and I paraphrase):"I can only research what I do because there are so many who have come before me to whom I can turn for basic knowledge. It is only because of each of the narrowly focussed individuals at each step that a full and true understanding of the complexities of life can be had. Each person can only hold enough knowledge to add one small rung to the ladder, but together we can climb to the moon." This illustrates the point that our societies level of knowledge and technology is at a stage in which there simply must be specialists in order for our society to take advantage of the information available to us.
Simply put, without specialists, our society would find itself bogged down in the Sargasso sea of information overload. While it was fine for early physicists to learn and understand the few laws and ideas that existed during their times, now, no one individual can possibly digest and assimilate all of the knowledge in any given area.
On the other hand, Over specialization means narrow focii in which people can lose the larger picture.No one can hope to understand the human body by only inspecting one's own toe-nails. What we learn from a narrow focus may be internally logically coherent but may be irrelevant or fallacious within the framework of a broader perspective. Further, if we inspect only our toe-nails, we may conclude that the whole body is hard and white. Useful conclusions and thus perhaps useful inventions must come by sharing among specialists. Simply throwing out various discovieries means we have a pile of useless discoveries, it is only when one can make with them a mosaic that we can see that they may form a picture.
Not only may over-specialization be dangerous in terms of the truth, purity and cohesion of knowledge, but it can also serve to drown moral or universall issues. Generalists and only generalists can see a broad enough picture to realize and introduce to the world the problems of the environment. With specialization, each person focusses on their research and their goals. Thus, industrialization, expansion, and new technologies are driven ahead. Meanwhile no individual can see the wholisitc view of our global existence in which true advancement may mean stifling individual specialists for the greater good of all.
Finally, over-specialization in a people's daily lives and jobs has meant personal and psychological compartmentalization. People are forced into pigeon holes early in life (at least by university) and must conciously attempt to consume external forms of stimuli and information in order not to be lost in their small and isolated universe. Not only does this make for narrowly focussed and generally pooprly-educated individuals, but it guarantees a sense of loss of community, often followed by a feeling of psychological displacement and personal dissatisfaction.
Without generalists, society becomes inward-looking and eventually inefficient. Without a society that recongnizes the impotance of braod-mindedness and fora for sharing generalities, individuals become isolated. Thus, while our form of society necessitates specialists, generalists are equally important. Specialists drive us forward in a series of thrusts while generalists make sure we are still on the jousting field and know what the stakes are.
阅卷人评语——6分
这是一篇非常优秀的Issue分析——有见底、理由充分、用语精确。首段提出作者的立场,并且引出了作者即将展开论述的情境:"In this era of rapid social and technological change leading to increasing life complexity and psychological displacement . . . ."
论证本身有两部分。第一部分给出了关于专才的有说服力的例子,主要在医学领域。第二部分给出了同样有说服力、组织较好的例子来反驳过分专业化,其主要原因为以下三点:
1、 逻辑方面(受训单一的专家们常不能着眼全局)
2、 道德方面(通才们常常能够理解获得‘大局的利益’需要什么)
3、 个人方面(过早地专门化/类别化可能带来心理伤害)
随后的专家确证(quotation from a prominent medical researcher)和生动的比喻(to inspect only one's toenails is to ignore the whole body)加强了论证的严谨性。
这篇文章优秀的原因并不只于它的推理。文章用语精确而形象("bogged down in a Sargasso sea of information overload," "a pile of useless discoveries," and "specialists drive us forward in a series of thrusts, while generalists make sure we are still on the jousting field")。 过渡性短语和观点一直指引读者理清文章思维,继续阅读。这是一篇针对该话题的非常优秀的答卷。
5分答卷
Specialists are not overrated today. More generalists may be needed, but not to overshadow the specialists. Generalists can provide a great deal of information on many topics of interest with a broad range of ideas. People who look at the overall view of things can help with some of the large problems our society faces today. But specialists are necessary to gain a better understanding of more in depth methods to solve problems or fixing things.
One good example of why specialists are not overrated is in the medical field. Doctors are necessary for people to live healthy lives. When a person is sick, he may go to a general practitioner to find out the cause of his problems. Usually, this kind of "generalized" doctor can help most ailments with simple and effective treatments. Sometimes, though, a sickness may go beyond a family doctor's knowledge or the prescribed treatments don't work the way they should. When a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed as a disease that requires more care than a family doctor can provide, he may be referred to a specialist. For instance, a person with constant breathing problems that require hospitalization may be suggested to visit an asthma specialist. Since a family doctor has a great deal of knowledge of medicine, he can decide when his methods are not effective and the patient needs to see someone who knows more about the specific problem; someone who knows how it begins, progresses, and specified treatments. This is an excellent example of how a generalied person may not be equipped enough to handle something as well as a specialized one can.
Another example of a specialist who is needed instead of a generalist involves teaching. In grammar school, children learn all the basic principles of reading, writing, and arithematic. But as children get older and progress in school, they gain a better understanding of the language and mathematical processes. As the years in school increase, they need to learn more and more specifics and details about various subjects. They start out by learning basic math concepts such as addition, subtraction, division, and multiplication. A few years later, they are ready to begin algebraic concepts, geometry, and calculus. They are also ready to learn more advanced vocabulary, the principles of how all life is composed and how it functions. One teacher or professor can not provide as much in depth discussion on all of these topics as well as one who has learned the specifics and studied mainly to know everything that is currently known about one of these subjects. Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects and finding out new facts on the old ones.
These are only two examples of why specialists are not highly overrated and more generalists are not necessary to the point of overshadowing them. Generalists are needed to give the public a broad understanding of some things. But , specialists are important to help maintain the status, health, and safety of our society. Specialists are very necessary.
阅卷人评语——5分
通过讨论对通才和专长的需求,作者展示了一篇对题目复杂性发展较好的文章。
这篇文章基于两个精心挑选的详细事例。第一个(第二段)首先讨论了医学通才(一般医务工作者)和专才的必要性,随后转入一个例子中的例子(呼吸问题和对哮喘专家的必要性)。下一段的事例也具备这种从一般到具体的延伸特点。此处,讨论集中在教育领域,从小学到高中,从初等运算到微积分。
使用恰当的连接词:"but," "usually," and "for instance," 增添了行文的流畅性。文章以重述作者主题而结尾。
虽然作者较好地处理了语言和语法,几处清晰度方面的缺陷让这篇论证有力的文章低于6分。问题包括代词缺少指代("When a sickness progresses or becomes diagnosed, . . . he may be referred to a specialist")、一个并列结构错误("how it begins, progresses and specified treatments")、语法粗糙用语不精确("Generalized teachers are required to begin molding students at a very early age so they can get ready for the future ahead of them in gaining more facts about the basic subjects.") 语法错误
4分答卷
Specialists are just what their name says: people who specialize in one part of a very general scheme of things. A person can't know everything there is to know about everything. This is why specialists are helpful. You can take one general concept and divide it up three ways and have three fully developed different concepts instead of one general concept that no one really knows about. Isn't it better to really know something well, than to know everything half-way.
Take a special ed teacher compared to a general ed teacher. The general ed teacher knows how to deal with most students. She knows how to teach a subject to a student that is on a normal level. But what would happen to the child in the back of the room with dyslexia? She would be so lost in that general ed classroom that she would not only not learn, but be frustrated and quite possibly, have low self-esteem and hate school. If there is a special ed teacher there who specializes in children with learning disabilities, she can teach the general ed teacher how to cope with this student as well as modify the curriculum so that the student can learn along with the others. The special ed teacher can also take that child for a few hours each day and work with her on her reading difficulty one-on-one, which a general ed teacher never would have time to do.
A general ed teacher can't know what a special ed teacher knows and a special ed teacher can't know what a general ed teacher knows. But the two of them working together and specializing in their own things can really get a lot more accomplished. The special ed teacher is also trained to work on the child's self-esteem, which has a big part in how successful this child will be. Every child in the United States of America has the right to an equal education. How can a child with a learning disability receive the same equal education as a general ed student if there was no specialist there to help both teacher and child?
Another thing to consider is how a committee is supposed to work together. Each person has a special task to accomplish and when these people all come together, with their tasks finished, every aspect of the community's work is completely covered. Nothing is left undone. In this case there are many different specialists to meet the general goal of the committee.
When you take into account that a specialist contributes only a small part of the generalist aspect, it seems ridiculous to say that specialists are overrated. The generalists looks to the specialists any time they need help or clarification on their broad aspect. Specialists and generalists are part of the same system, so if a specialist is overrated, then so is a generalist.
阅卷人评语——4分
这篇文章对题目进行了足够的分析。首段目的模糊的定义“专才”后,作者提出了一个切题的事例(the special education teacher)来表明专才的重要性。该例子引领全文,为整体的4分做出了贡献。
第二个关于委员会工作的例子稍欠说服力。然而,它似乎有助于表明作者关于“通才”的定义,即所有专才对某一主题的知识的集合。
虽然作者关于专才与通才的关系的见解与众不同,但它在文中被表达得很清楚。然而,作者并没有将这些观点阐述到一个足够的深度,或者有足够的逻辑控制,来获得高于4分的分数。
文章大体没有错误。虽然语句有时不精确、冗长,但基本没有句型、语法和使用错误。整体而言,这篇文章表现了英语写作要素的足够掌握。
3分答卷
To quote the saying, "Jack of all trades, master of none," would be my position on the statement. I feel specialists in all areas of knowledge lead to a higher standard of living for everyone. Specializing in different areas allows us to use each others talents to the highest level and maximize potential. As an example, if a person required brain surgery, would they rather have a brain surgeon or a general practitioner doing the work? Clearly a specialist would do the better job and give the patient a chance at a better life.
A university education starts by laying the groundwork for general knowledge but then narrows down to a specific field. General knowledge and a broad prospective are important, but if there was no focus on specific areas, our overall knowledge as a population would be seriously lessened.
Another example of specialists not being overated would be international trade. Not every nation can provide for themselves. They need to get products and ideas from other parts of the world because they are better at providing them. This allows for a growing economy if two different nations can provide each other with two different products. If one country can produce oranges better than another, it should trade the oranges for the fish that it can not produce. If generalizing was the normal thing to do and both countries tried to produce all kinds of products, the countries would probably survive, but not have the standard of living they presently have.
阅卷人评语——3分
作者的立场很明确:专才既重要也必要。但是,作者没有用充分的理由和逻辑例子来支持这个立场。
第一段提出了一个恰当的脑外科医生和全科医师的例子。但是,第二段中越来越狭窄的大学教育的例子只有两句话,严重缺乏展开。这对巩固作者的立场几乎没有帮助。
第三段提出了另一个文中展开最好的例子。不幸的是,这个例子逻辑上不够清晰。作者试图辩论说“专才”国家(一个产桔子较好的国家)优于“通才”国家(一个桔子和其他产品都生产得很好的国家)。作者告诉我们,这个通才国家劣于其他国家。这个结论没有从作者的辩论中逻辑地体现出来,而且似乎同日常现实不符。
虽然文章整体用语不够精确,但是作者的意思并不模糊。得到3分的主要原因是缺乏足够的展开和例子的不正确使用。
2分答卷
In the situation of health I feel that specialists are very important. For example if a person has heart problems, choose a heart specialist over a genral medicine Dr. However if a person is having a wide range of syptoms, perhaps choose a Dr. with a wide range of experience might be more helpful.
It also depends on the type of problem you are having. For example I would not suggest taking a troubled child to a theorpist who specializes in marriage problems. In some cases have a specialists helps to insure that you are getting the best possibly treatment. On the other hand dealing with a person who has a wide range of experience may be able to find different ways of dealing with a particular problem.
Since the quotation did not state exactely what type of specialist we are dealing with it is also hard to determine the importance of having a specialist is. For example the could be health or problems with a car, or basically anything else. I feel that this information should not have been left out. I guess the bottom line is that I feel sometimes a specialist is very important.
阅卷人评语——2分
这是一篇对论题有严重错误的分析。答卷中的辩论倾向于专才,但是理由和例子都不够有说服力。不要带“一个生病的孩子去看婚姻问题的专家”的例子不仅过分简单而且不切题,因为这两个专家之间的区别不同于通才和专才的区别。
句子的结构和用语很糟,以至于有时很难理解文章。然而,这不是一篇一分文章:作者在文中表明了立场,使用了非常弱的分析来阐释了立场,并清晰地传递了一些思想。
1分答卷
I disagree with the statement about specialists, we need specialists who take individual areas and specialize. A generalists can pinpoint a problem. He or she cannot determine the magnitude of the problem. A specialist can find the root of the problem. When he or she has years working in that specific field. For example, when i got sick i went to a doctor. He did blood work, x-ray, talk to me, ect. He prescribed me a medicine. I got worst. So i decided to go another doctor. Now, i am doing great. A specialist knows the facts right away. Otherwise, it will take longer or not at all.
阅卷人评语——1分
这篇答卷根本没有讨论题目。
第一句话声明了作者对支持专才的立场,但是随后没有相应的辩论。一些观点似乎矛盾(e.g., "generalists can pinpoint a problem")并且例子令人费解。如果文章解释说第一个(不成功的)医生是一个通才,而第二个(成功的)医生是一个专才,这个例子就会是有助于论述的。然而,文中例子是不清晰甚至有误导性的。总结性陈述仅仅增添了读者的困惑。
因为大多数句子都很短且突兀,所以他们试图传递的思想也是突兀的。作者需要提供过渡性的词汇和观点,从而提高这篇文章的逻辑一致性。而且基本错误和语法错误很常见,但是使这篇文章得到1分的主要原因是缺少条理清楚的论证。 |
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